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Mz.Iverson3
Sixth Man


Joined: Aug 21, 2002
Posts: 56

PostPosted: Sat Nov 16, 2002 9:37 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was good,please keep it going.
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nieceye_n_iverson
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Joined: Nov 3, 2002
Posts: 814
Location: *North Carolina*

PostPosted: Sun Nov 17, 2002 12:32 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ok yall i am on punishment and i m bored so yall will be seeing more added on to this story. Here goes:

tawanna reads the message on the 2way and she decides to wait a while be 4 she goes to the hotel. when she finally goes it is 10:30. so she walks in the hotel (not giving a damn about the front desk)and goes up to the room to find her man. she knocks on the door and allen closes it imediatley when he sees who it is.

t- allen, open the damn door nigga. i aint even gonna tripp on this because you are just sorry. OPEN THE DOOR!
(allen slowly opens the door. tawanna smacks the s*** out of him and then he almost hits her but he catches himself)
a- you lucky you my wife and that i feel guilty or i would have hit ur ass back!
t- how could you do this to me after all the times when people have told me you were a cheater and i took up for you and trusted you? huh? answer me nigga?
a- look we need to go somewhere else cause we dont need to do this here.
t-(crying) i loved you and trusted you and all you do is hurt me!
a- baby dont cry.
t- where is the hoe i wanna meet her ass.
(allen gets the girl/hoe and she puts her clothes on and walks out into the hall.)
t- whats your name bitch?
hoe- tesha
t- if you can honestly tell me that you didnt know allen was married i will not kick your ass.
te-.....................(silence)
t- ok!

tawanna grabs the girl by her tracks and beats her head against the wall. allen grabs her and pulls her off the hoe. tesha runs as fast as she can out the hotel.

t- lets handle this at home allen!

(they leave and go home)

t- how could you do this to me?
a-(looking her straight in the eye)baby, i love you but it gets hard for me to try to stay faithful to my wife and tell these hoes to back off. I promise i swear on my life that i will never hurt you like this again. i love you so much and i never wanna lose you so if you give me thin one more chance i will do right but you.
t- (thinking: he is so fine!) this is your last chance allen. pick me and your children or these trick you but fuccing wit. I am sick of playing second to all these other woman.
a- so you forgive me?
t- i forgive you but i aint gonna forget it.

(tawanna walks up stairs to her and ai room with allen following)

t- what do you think you doing?
a- i am bout to take a shower than sleep in my bed.
t- not in this bed cause the couch is calling you name mr. Iverson.

(allen doesnt complain cuz he knows he deserves it)

allen lays on the couch feeling guilty while tawanna crys silently to herself thinking of how allen cheated on her. allen hears because the house is so quiet because the kids are at his mothers house and he walks upstairs. he kisses her in the dark and feels all over her body and yall know what happens after that...

Morning...

tawanna goes and picks up deuce and tiaura ferom ai's momma's house and then they come back home. Allen promises tawanna he will take her on a shopping spree to TRY to make up for the cheating so him, tawanna deuce and tiaura goes to the mall. well they get in the mall and they are standing bout to get some food when deuce says he needs to got to the bathroom. AI takes him and then the dude that tawanna say there the day before(jamie) is there. he walks up to her.

j- didnt think i would see you again girl.
t- (walking away) whateva.
j- and who is this? (he says looking down at tiaura.
t- my daughter tiaura.
j- she is a cute lil girl.
t- thanx but bye.
j - wait i aint finished talking to you (grabs her arm)
t- get off me!
tiaura- get of my mommy!
j- shut up lil girl!(still holding tawanna's arm)
t- dont tell my daughter to shut up!
j- then u shuut up.

then allen and deuce return and then ai sees this nigga holdin his wifey arm. deuce is standing behind allen.

a- nigga what u doing touching my wife?
j- oh s*** u ai? ne ways i do whateva i want so fucc u.

allen pushes jamie off of tawanna and then jamie pushes him and he stumbles back and knocks deuce down and deucee hits his head on the floor and starts crying. tawanna runs to deuce and picks him up.

a- nigga i am gonna kill you! you hurt my damn son!

(allen starts beating jamie down and security guards come break it up and escorts them all out!)

tawanna, allen and their kids are getting in the car. they drive home and they all are sitting on the couch. deuce with an ice pak on his head.

a- who was that dude tawanna?
t- the dude i told you what was trying to holla at me.
a- he lucky the security guards broke that fight up cuz i was bout to kill that nigga for pushing me on my son.
t- you was handling him good.
a- i know.
t- thanx baby 4 coming to my rescue.
a- thats what i'm here for. but really I love you baby.
t- i luv you to but you still going to take me on my shopping spree!

A week later they go tothe movies and they see the tesha (they girl ai was cheating with).

*****please add on hope you like it cuz i dont know where 2 go from here******
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IversonsTruLuv03
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Joined: Nov 16, 2002
Posts: 10
Location: California:Crenshaw Blvd!!!

PostPosted: Sun Nov 17, 2002 3:48 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by nieceye_n_iverson:
ok yall i am on punishment and i m bored so yall will be seeing more added on to this story. Here goes:

tawanna reads the message on the 2way and she decides to wait a while be 4 she goes to the hotel. when she finally goes it is 10:30. so she walks in the hotel (not giving a damn about the front desk)and goes up to the room to find her man. she knocks on the door and allen closes it imediatley when he sees who it is.

t- allen, open the damn door nigga. i aint even gonna tripp on this because you are just sorry. OPEN THE DOOR!
(allen slowly opens the door. tawanna smacks the s*** out of him and then he almost hits her but he catches himself)
a- you lucky you my wife and that i feel guilty or i would have hit ur ass back!
t- how could you do this to me after all the times when people have told me you were a cheater and i took up for you and trusted you? huh? answer me nigga?
a- look we need to go somewhere else cause we dont need to do this here.
t-(crying) i loved you and trusted you and all you do is hurt me!
a- baby dont cry.
t- where is the hoe i wanna meet her ass.
(allen gets the girl/hoe and she puts her clothes on and walks out into the hall.)
t- whats your name bitch?
hoe- tesha
t- if you can honestly tell me that you didnt know allen was married i will not kick your ass.
te-.....................(silence)
t- ok!

tawanna grabs the girl by her tracks and beats her head against the wall. allen grabs her and pulls her off the hoe. tesha runs as fast as she can out the hotel.

t- lets handle this at home allen!

(they leave and go home)

t- how could you do this to me?
a-(looking her straight in the eye)baby, i love you but it gets hard for me to try to stay faithful to my wife and tell these hoes to back off. I promise i swear on my life that i will never hurt you like this again. i love you so much and i never wanna lose you so if you give me thin one more chance i will do right but you.
t- (thinking: he is so fine!) this is your last chance allen. pick me and your children or these trick you but fuccing wit. I am sick of playing second to all these other woman.
a- so you forgive me?
t- i forgive you but i aint gonna forget it.

(tawanna walks up stairs to her and ai room with allen following)

t- what do you think you doing?
a- i am bout to take a shower than sleep in my bed.
t- not in this bed cause the couch is calling you name mr. Iverson.

(allen doesnt complain cuz he knows he deserves it)

allen lays on the couch feeling guilty while tawanna crys silently to herself thinking of how allen cheated on her. allen hears because the house is so quiet because the kids are at his mothers house and he walks upstairs. he kisses her in the dark and feels all over her body and yall know what happens after that...

Morning...

tawanna goes and picks up deuce and tiaura ferom ai's momma's house and then they come back home. Allen promises tawanna he will take her on a shopping spree to TRY to make up for the cheating so him, tawanna deuce and tiaura goes to the mall. well they get in the mall and they are standing bout to get some food when deuce says he needs to got to the bathroom. AI takes him and then the dude that tawanna say there the day before(jamie) is there. he walks up to her.

j- didnt think i would see you again girl.
t- (walking away) whateva.
j- and who is this? (he says looking down at tiaura.
t- my daughter tiaura.
j- she is a cute lil girl.
t- thanx but bye.
j - wait i aint finished talking to you (grabs her arm)
t- get off me!
tiaura- get of my mommy!
j- shut up lil girl!(still holding tawanna's arm)
t- dont tell my daughter to shut up!
j- then u shuut up.

then allen and deuce return and then ai sees this nigga holdin his wifey arm. deuce is standing behind allen.

a- nigga what u doing touching my wife?
j- oh s*** u ai? ne ways i do whateva i want so fucc u.

allen pushes jamie off of tawanna and then jamie pushes him and he stumbles back and knocks deuce down and deucee hits his head on the floor and starts crying. tawanna runs to deuce and picks him up.

a- nigga i am gonna kill you! you hurt my damn son!

(allen starts beating jamie down and security guards come break it up and escorts them all out!)

tawanna, allen and their kids are getting in the car. they drive home and they all are sitting on the couch. deuce with an ice pak on his head.

a- who was that dude tawanna?
t- the dude i told you what was trying to holla at me.
a- he lucky the security guards broke that fight up cuz i was bout to kill that nigga for pushing me on my son.
t- you was handling him good.
a- i know.
t- thanx baby 4 coming to my rescue.
a- thats what i'm here for. but really I love you baby.
t- i luv you to but you still going to take me on my shopping spree!

A week later they go tothe movies and they see the tesha (they girl ai was cheating with).

*****please add on hope you like it cuz i dont know where 2 go from here******

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IversonsTruLuv03
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Joined: Nov 16, 2002
Posts: 10
Location: California:Crenshaw Blvd!!!

PostPosted: Sun Nov 17, 2002 3:59 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

dat story is hard!! where da rest of it at??? i wanna see wut gon happen
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Mz.Iverson3
Sixth Man


Joined: Aug 21, 2002
Posts: 56

PostPosted: Sun Nov 17, 2002 4:51 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

That story was tight.
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nieceye_n_iverson
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Joined: Nov 3, 2002
Posts: 814
Location: *North Carolina*

PostPosted: Sun Nov 17, 2002 8:25 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

WHAT UP YALL, I HAVE BEEN READING ALL THE STORIES YALL BEEN WRITING SO I THOUGHT I WOULD ADD ONE OF MY OWN. IT IS MY 1ST 1 SO PLEEZ BE NICE! BUT FEEL FREE TO ADD ON 2 IT.

ok, tawanna and her girls were just walking out the mall when this tall light skinned brotha named jamie comes up to them.

j- hey beautiful can i holla?
t-(looks around) what? you talking to me?
j- yea babygirl i am looking dead at u right?
t- well i guess u are.
j- whats your name cutie?
t- tawanna but...
j- well tawanna can i get your number?
t- i cant do that cuz i gotta man.
j- so what your man gotta do with anything?
t- he got alot to do with it!
j- look i didnt ask did you have a man i asked could i get your number.
t- well no then.
j- look shawty maybe i came on to strong. can i pleez get your number cause you look good and i wanna holla at you.
(he says this while putting his arms around her waist)
t- I think you should back up off me 4 i call my husband.
j- and what he gonna do to me?
t- look you don't know who you messin wit nigga so roll up off me!
(2 of allen's friends are walking past them to go in the mall.. they get in the mall)

allen'sfriend#1: did you just see tawanna all over that nigga?
af#2: yea we need to call him up and tell him bout wifey.
af#1: yea i heard dat.
(allen friend #1 and his name is will calls allen to tell him bout tawanna)

a- holla at me?
w- ay, yo what up allen?
a- nothing chillin but who this?
w- this will.
a- oh, what you want?
w- me and derek(af#2)at the mall and we saw tawanna all hugged up on this light skinned dude.
a- my wifey tawanna?
w- yea man he was all up on her real close.
a- iight nigga thanx 4 telling me I'ma holla at you later.
w- no problem mane.
(they hang up)
****Meanwhile back outside****

tawanna- nigga get your hands off me!
jamie- man forget you dumb bitch!
t- ya momma the bitch nigga!
J- whateva yo forget ya azz!
(jamie walks away and tawanna's friends christy and sheka join the convo)

s- dang teedee(tawanna nickname) you always got dudes trying to get wit u!
t- i know but he was about to get his ass kicked putting his hands on me like he got a problem!
c-he was cute though!
t- yea in a few more seconds he wold have been cute and getting his ass kicked!

(tawanna drops her girls off home and then goes back to her and ai house.)

t- hey baby
ai- i need to talk to you about something.
t- where the kids at?
a- they at my momma house but dont worry bout that. Whats this i here you at the mall all up on this light-skinned nigga?
t- It was this dude trying to holla and he started to get physical but i told him i was married.
a- DONT LIE TO ME!
t- aint nobody lying you need to calm your crazy ass down!
a- man whateva are you cheating on me?
t- what makes you think...
a- are you cheating on me?
t- now you know i would neva cheat on you baby!
a- well you betta not or i will make you regret it.
(allen starts walking away then tawanna yells at him...)
t- you cheat on me!
a- what?
t- nigga i aint no tape recorder you heard me!
a- you better watch who you raise your voice at girl!
t- whateva i am going up stairs. I need to get away from your paranoid ass.
(tawanna walks upstairs and naps 4 a while. It is like 9:00 when she wakes up. then she goes down stairs to apologize to allen. when she gets down there she realizes he is isnt there and she walks to the kitchen table and sees he left his 2 way. the following message was up there



nullallen meet me at the ramada at 8:15 room 124 and i promise to give you what you want!


**** hope yall like the story please add on to it!****
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nieceye_n_iverson
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Joined: Nov 3, 2002
Posts: 814
Location: *North Carolina*

PostPosted: Sun Nov 17, 2002 8:29 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

my bad yall where i put nullallen it is supossed to be allen.
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j.iverson
Sixth Man


Joined: Sep 13, 2002
Posts: 74

PostPosted: Sun Nov 17, 2002 8:50 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was tight continue the story please
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nieceye_n_iverson
All-Star


Joined: Nov 3, 2002
Posts: 814
Location: *North Carolina*

PostPosted: Mon Nov 18, 2002 6:19 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ok ppl i have been busy doing otha things but i will continue a.s.a.p.
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nieceye_n_iverson
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Joined: Nov 3, 2002
Posts: 814
Location: *North Carolina*

PostPosted: Tue Nov 19, 2002 3:23 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

iight yall here go some more...

At first AI saw tesha so he tried to move tawanna away from her so she wouldnt see her cuz her wasnt looking 4 drama. But tesha saw them and she decided that she was gonna go try to start something.

tesha: hey allen you comin ova tonite?
AI: look dont come ova here starting s*** iight?
Tesha: why you trying to front huh? I know it aint cuz wifey here cuz behind closed doors you be dawgin her.
ai- girl the fucc out of here wit dat!!!
tawanna-look tia, tesha, tenfa whateva your name is. I dont care what u and chuck did or had cause he is my husband and fucc wit him again and there will be consequences and reprocussions (my spelling is wack).
te- well its not my fault that your manm aint faithful.
(tawanna holding her temper)
ta- i aint gon say s*** else 2 you cuz my kids here, but yo ass is pushing me to my damn limit!
te- well ya really gonna hate this...ya man went down on me hoe!
Ai- bitch the only person that went down is your ugly ass!
( tawanna pissed of losses it)
ta- now you done pissed me off hoe!!!

Broadcast of the fight:
tawanna punches the girl and layed her out wit one hit. Then she kicks the girl in her stomach and the girl grabs her foot and makes her fall. Tawanna jumps on top of tesha and is beating her in her face then the girl grabs her hair and attempts to pull her off of her. (AI is mad because the bitch lied on him so he lets her get her ass beat) Then tawanna chokes tesha then, then tesha slaps tawanna and makes her fall off her. tesha stands up and kicks tawanna with her 6 in. heels. Allen runs up and pushes tesha then she falls. (deuce and Tiaura are crying by this time)tawanna runs up and starts beating the girls in the face. Then ai turns around and sees 5 0, po po, cops,(whateva yall wanna call them) and grabs tawanna and the kids(somehow) and puts then all in the car.

on the way home:

a- that fight was crushal! (spelling)
t- she got on my damn nerves.
a- i cant believe that bitch lied on me like that.
t- so you saying you didnt go down?!!!?????
a- hell no i didnt! I dont know who or what been up in that before i got 2 it.
t- well you better not have because you comin home kissing me errday... hmmmm thats the s*** that get a nigga shot!
a- naw i would neva disrespect you like that. I know i have cheated and did my wrongs but you still the only one 4 me and thats how it always is gonna be. But did you see me push ol' girl afta she kicked you wit them big ass heels?
(the kids in the back of the car sleep)
t- yea.
a- i would have done more but the fact that she was a female/werewolf held me back!
(they laughing)
t- dont get me wrong yes i do hate her but dont try to play her cuz yes you did cheat wit her.
a- naw my boys influenced me to do dat girl cuz they said i was whipped.
t- well you better figure out whether you want your boys approval or your marriage.
a- you know I want you baby.
t- ok. I taught my son well cause thats what i thought!
a- you crazy girl!!!

They get home to find a not on there door step that says:

Tawanna,
this is your boy Tyree.
Remember me your old boyfriend from high school? Well I just moved to Philly and i just wanted to know can I holla back at you?
i know you married and everythig but when i do be seein you on in pictures and junk you be lookin' sexy as hell and I just wanna get back wit you so we can get back to what we had in highschool. Well babygirl I am out so peace.


*** more lata yall***
***and as i keep saying please add on 2 it***
*** if you feelin the story let me know and tell ya friends about it********
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IversonsTruLuv03
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Joined: Nov 16, 2002
Posts: 10
Location: California:Crenshaw Blvd!!!

PostPosted: Tue Nov 19, 2002 5:43 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

dis s*** just keep gettin exitin by da minute!!! but dang why its takin so long???????? wut eva i jus wanna know da rest of it. nieceye_n_iverson pleez hurry up wit da story!
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chrisann
Sixth Man


Joined: Oct 7, 2002
Posts: 98
Location: Jamaica

PostPosted: Tue Nov 19, 2002 6:11 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Dis is da tightest story so far....nieceye_n_iverson keep doin ya thing gurl.
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nieceye_n_iverson
All-Star


Joined: Nov 3, 2002
Posts: 814
Location: *North Carolina*

PostPosted: Tue Nov 19, 2002 1:28 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

here is a little more:

Allen got to the door first so he picked up the note.

a- do you know somebody named Tyree?
t- no. why?
a- you dont know somebody named tyree from high school?
(tawanna thinking...)
t- oh yea. he was my old boyfriend... why?
a- dont worry about it.
t- why allen... what does that say?
a- what does what say?
t- the thing you holding in ya hand.
a- nothing, it aint important.
(tawanna grabs for it)
a- girl whats wrong wit you?
t- let me see be4 i get mad chuck.
(she grabs 4 it again and this time she is succesful)

Tawanna reads the letter.

t- why you aint want me to see this?
a- cuz we already havin some problems wit our marriage andf last thing i need is this nigga fuccin it up even more.
t- dont even worry about it. i only went wit tyree because i knew he had a crush on me and i aint wanna hurt his feelings. he was ugly then then and he probally still ugly now.
a- ok, lets just 4get him then iight?
t- iight.

They all go inside the house and Deuce and Tiaura are down stairs watching Shrek while Tawanna and Allen are upstairs doing they own thing. Tawanna gives allen a backrub and then he gives he one and the go overboard a little...

t- allen, stop the kids are downstairs.
a- so... and.
t- really quit and let me put them 2 sleep.
a- iight but hurry ya ass up girl.
t- shut up nigga.

Tawanna puts the kids to sleep and then her and allen start... ya know!

The next day allen goes to basketball practice and tawanna, deuce, tiaura go grocery shopping. while tawanna is looking at the some food (greedy ass...now let me quit) this fine, gorgeous, to die for, man, with light skin, pretty hair, beautiful smile, with green contacts comes up to her.

gorgeus man- Remember me?
t- ummm... really I cant say that i do.
( tawanna checking him out seeing how fine he is)
gorgeous- here's a hint. I left a note on your door step yesterday.
t- TYREE!!!???
ty- yea.
t- i didnt even recognize you because you look so good... i mean different!
ty- yeah a brotha got his s*** fixed.
t- i can see that!
( tiaura and deuce are walking away)
ty- but can i holla at you?
(tawanna not thinking)
t- yea cause you are fine!
ty- ok heres my number.

tyree gives tawanna his number and she turns around to find her kids gone.

t- O my gosh where are my kids!!???

tyree hears her scream this and runs to her.

ty- whats wrong?
t- i cant find find my kids, I dont know where my kids are, where are my children at???
ty- its ok i will help you find them.

they split up and they both look around for about an hour then tyree finds tawanna holding deuce and tiara's hand.

t- thank you tyree!
ty- you can thank me by calling me.
(tawanna smiles and tyree leaves)
t- as for you 2. Why did you leave without me knowin?
ti- mommy we wanted to go somewhere else cuz that aisle was sooooo boring.
(deuce nodding his head)
t- well i know whats gonna be fun... when ya daddy beats ya ass! does that sound like fun huh?
ti and deuce- no mommy please dont!
t- you shouldve thought of that before you went off by yourselves!

tawanna checks out then the goes home. Allen is back from basketball practice by this time and tawanna just cant wait to tell him bout his kids.

t- allen guess what our kids did today?
a- man, what did they do this time????
t- they ran off in the store and i had to look for them in the store for about an hour till i found them.
ti- noooo mommy you didnt find me! this man that mommy was talking to came and found us.
(tawannna getting nervous)
a- what man?
t- the girl doesnt know what she is talking about.
ti- yes i do mommy. he said his name was tyree and he told mommy to call him and she said she would. and she kept smiling at him... oh yea daddy she said he looked soooo good!
t- where not talking about tyree, we are talking about yall runnin off in the store.
a- tiaura, deuce go to your room. tawanna I wanna talk about tyree.(allen is mad as hell)
t- baby it aint even...
a- bitch shut the fucc up!!!


**** ok yall I am outie*********
**** i am sorry it takes so long but I have basketball practice and games and during the week but i will find as much time as i can to continue********
****please dont think i like tawanna because i really dont but i am just gonna be nice while telling this story*******
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AIGirl3
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Joined: Aug 12, 2002
Posts: 300
Location: Michigan

PostPosted: Wed Nov 20, 2002 5:32 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Nieceye you are doin a great job girl!?!?!
You should really keep it up and I would really enjoy reading some more of your stuff, I'm almost scared to write because I migth mess somethin up with my little parts.
But keep on doin tha thang girl!!!
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mucleman
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Joined: Nov 19, 2002
Posts: 1
Location: rockingham nc

PostPosted: Wed Nov 20, 2002 8:41 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

wuzz up ,well my interest is what allen said in the interveiw .about the cops see down south we deal with problems like that everyday.here with crooked cops we dont have to touch them see them are even no they there. just a picture of them are something of theres and we will asure you you will not b bothered with them any more what ever you ask it will be done.keep people away.bring people back,bring them closer,are keep them away.are change something you don't like.we are special people down here in the south.don't be afraid anymore just yell.and i will hear you.two thaings in this world good and bad.just say i don't do bad.only good.if allen need a hand just yell i'll hear you.
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nieceye_n_iverson
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Location: *North Carolina*

PostPosted: Thu Nov 21, 2002 4:04 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ok. here is a little more:

t- who are you talking to like that because i am ya wife not one of these hoes that you be fuccin wit.
a- why the hell you take that nigga number?
t- just because i took his # dont mean ima call him.
a- so you shouldnt have taken the number in the first place.
t- I am a grown ass woman and you really need to check ya role in my life cuz you are my husband not my damn daddy!
a- I'm not ya daddy but you are living in my damn house so you gonna do what i tell you to.
t- oh, fucc you allen! s*** you act so damn retarded sometimes!
a- WHAT!!!
t- you heard me... stupid bitch!

(Allen grabs tawanna by the arm)

a- you betta watch who you talking to cuz i aint gonna take this s*** from no woman and especially a woman that is living in my house!
t- get your hands off me.

(allen lets go of her arm then pushes her and she falls to the floor)

t- i hate you!!!

She runs grabs her keys and leaves the house. She drives to ann's house where she finds her cooking dinner. She rings the doorbell and ann lets her in the house.

ann- hey baby, whats wrong?
t- me and allen had a argument.
ann- again? yall gotta grow up cuz yall having alot of problems. What about this time?
t- its a long story, but this dude gave me his number and allen found out.
a- dang, men talk about they dont like jealous women but they the ones that got the big problem with jealously.

after about 2 hours of talking to ann, tawanna thinks thats she is ready to go home and face allen. But when she gets there its not just him and the kids there. It is 5 of his friends and about 9 females. The kids are upstairs in there rooms sleep. Tawanna walks in the house and sees whats going down.

***I know its only a little yall but I just wanna give yall something 2 sleep on*******

more a.s.a.p

If you like the story feel free to add on. If you want me to keep writing it then respond and tell about it and I will write more.

Thanx, 4 reading!
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 21, 2002 5:18 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

good job keep up the good work!!
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 21, 2002 7:28 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

nieceye_n_iverson I dont wanna mess your thing up. Take ur time and Keep doing ur thing.
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 21, 2002 11:47 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I think that you should keep goin but I already that Tawanna probably flipped out wit her 10 inch 5 head!?! (lmao) Ya'll know I'm mentally challenged...
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 22, 2002 12:28 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by AIGirl3:
I think that you should keep goin but I already that Tawanna probably flipped out wit her 10 inch 5 head!?! (lmao) Ya'll know I'm mentally challenged...


YOU CRAZY
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nieceye_n_iverson
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 22, 2002 2:22 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

k, here goes:

2 of the 9 girls are sitting on allens lap.
tawanna walks in.

t- what the fucc is this s***?
a- this aint whut it....baby listen...
t- is this what you do when i am not here?
a- listen to me ok...
t- no allen. im sick of this s***! i forgive you for cheating on me and i come home to a house full of bitches! what kind of s*** is this huh?
a- baby be4 you go off let me explain.

(allen's boys are behind him falling out laughing)

allen turns around and looks at them:

a- what the fucc is so damn funny?
af#1(will)- you are whipped nigga.
a- i'm whipped huh?
w- yea nigga.
a- u sure i'm whipped?
w- no doubt son!
a- WELL THEN GET THE FUCC OUT MY DAMN HOUSE!!

(allen kicks all the people out his house except 4 tawanna and his kids)

a- now let me explain...
t- what r your excuses this time?
a- my boys asked me can they come ova and i said yea. I didnt even know they was bringing da bitches but they did and i was mad at you so i let them stay. but i am sorry... and i didnt cheat on you and i never would again but i really am sorry i didnt tell them to leave.
t- so i guess they just fell on your lap huh?
a- i guess things did get carried away... but i promise you that if you forgive me 4 my bad judgement this time i promise that if i do some dumb s*** again i will be the first to sign the divorce papers and i aint playin this time... ima do right by you and ima treat you like me queen, girl i promise cuz you deserve the best and you the love of my life (tawanna ol' ...... ohhhhhh she make me so damn sick).
t- baby really this time i swear 2 God on my life and everything that i love that you betta not be bullshittin cuz if you are i am leavin 4 good and no talking me out.
a- aiight baby, now lets go make up cuz you know ima a man and you know what i need...

yall know what comes next...............

well about a week of a drama free life ai decides he is gonna go kick it w/ his boys will and derek(after them not speaking 4 a week after ai kicking them out) so he is sitting over at will house.

d- that was dead wrong how you kicked us out ur crib dawg. you know the girls made us walk back 2 our crib.
a- damn 4 reel?
d- yea, you couldve kicked ol boy, will out cuz he the one starting da s***!
w- now he know i was just jokin w/ him.
a- well dont play like that. and whats so funny with a nigga trying to get right wit his wife when he is hurting her? what is whipped about that dawg. you cant call yourself a real man unless you can admit you was wrong about some s***.
w and d- i feel ya on dat playa!
w- but allen, if you see them philly niggas, basically tony and dre, avoid them man.
a- why?
d- oh some s*** about they gonna hurt you?
a- why? what i do?
w- they say you a sell out and that you be trying to put niggas down cuz you money.
a- man, i aint neva put no nigga down becuz i got money! that aint even me cuzo!
w- still watch ya back yo becuz these niggas could be trouble; especially dont let them near tawanna cuz they said she is cute and they could cause some problems.
a- oh no doubt, no doubt, neva around wifey.

after a hour of kickin it w/them he goes home. tawanna just finished cooking.

a- hey baby.
t- hey.
a- what u cook?
t- ummm... steak, mashed potatoes,green beans, baked maccoroni (spelling i know), and a strawberry cheese cake for dessert.
a- damn my wifey got me eating good!
t- only 4 you baby!

ai, tawanna, deuce, and tiaura, sit down at the table and eat dinner.

t- tommorrow morining me and sheka (tawanna's friend) are gonna go jogging around her house. I am trying to get my figure back just 4 you boo boo!
a- i want you to get your body back and everything but sheka live only like 2 blocks from the projects and thats to close 4 you to be jogging around that way.

allen thinks about dem philly boys that dont like him (but like tawanna). (they live in the projects)

t- and i am a grown woman i can take care of myself. plus i am gonna take tiaura with me.
a- no youre not taking tiaura and you are not going yourself.
t- why?
a- i got my reasons, some good reasons to and you are not going joggin around by the projects.
t- baby look...wait, hold on, there gotta be something that you are not telling me.
a- there aint nothin that i am holding back. I just wanna keep my wifey and my little girl safe thats all.
t- well if it makes you feel any better, i wont go tommorrow...
a- ok.

they finish eating dinner and by this time it is like 7:00pm. Allen takes a nap and Tawanna decides she is gonna go joggin wit sheka now instead of tommorrow mornining. She leaves allen a note of where she is going(so he wont worry) and then She drops tiaura and deuce off at ann's house. then goes to sheka's apartment.

t- hey gurl ready to go joggin?
s- yea hold on i'm coming.

They go joggin and they are now joggin in the projects and they see this black benz that keeps circling the block. Then all of a sudden the boys (tony and dre)that hat ai stop in the middle of the street(they were in the benz) and approach tawanna and sheka.

tony- what up?
sheka- chillin.
dre- how you doin? (lookin at tawanna)
t- fine.
to- hold on... aint you ai's wifey?
t- yea.
dr- yea thats how i know your face, i seen yall together.
t- o.
dr- and a beautiful face it is. (SIKE... naw i quit)
t- thank you.
to- how about you hop in the car and we drive to our crib. both of yall.

sheka and tawanna look at each other.

t- no i have to be getting home and so does she.
s- yea, we gotta be going.
dr- let us give you a ride.
t- no, that wont be neccasary, (sp) really it wont.
to- so what the fucc you sayin? you tellin us no.
t- only if you stop asking me, if you keep on its gonna be a hell no!
dr- aye yo tony this bitch getting smart wit us dawg!!
to- ima show her who to get smart wit!

tony grabs tawanna and dre grabs sheka and they try to force them in the car. then all of a sudden from outta no where... ai pulls up in his bentley.

ai- aye, yo nigga get ya hands off my wife!

(everybody turns around)

to- whateva man, what you gonna do about it huh?
a- get your hands off my damn wife before things get ugly!
to- oh things bout to get ugly alright...

THEN tony pulls out a gun.........

***more lata*****
*** if ya feelin tha story holla back and let me know cuz that is the only reason i continue is when i get postive feedback****
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 22, 2002 2:26 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

here is a lil something im new at this so dont trip.......

(tawanna comes in and she looks around the room and spots allen on the couch with some b*tch on his lap)
t- what the fucc are u doing??!!
a-(jumps up the girl falls on the floor)hey baby i was just thinking about you.
(tawanna runs up and punch allen in the face he fall on the couch then tawanna goes over and starts beating the sh*t out of allen then one of his buddies come pick her up off of him)
t-i hope you happy you nasty azz b*tch.
a-baby........im im im sorry.
t-sorry my azz it's over allen im tired of yo shyt.
(tawanna goes upstairs and gets the kids and leave allen standing there with his friends and them hoes i mean them girls)
a-(after everybody leave allen goes and call his momma(ann) to see if tawanna and the kids ova there she said the kids there but tawanna left the house saying allen gonna get what he deserve or something like that)
a-oh shyt!! she finna go ova that nigga tyree's house.........

LET ME KNOW WHAT YALL THINK SOMEBODY CAN PICK UP AFTER THAT.
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 22, 2002 2:40 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

oh s*** girl that wuz tight!!! can you continue from the part where i left out about tony and dre???? keep up the good work and thanx 4 adding on!
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 22, 2002 5:24 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ok here is somemore:

t- o my god allen!
a- calm down teedee.
to- now what nigga?
a- look, whateva beef yall got with me,lets just keeep it with me. aint no need for my wife and my children to get invovled in it cuz they aint got s*** to do wit it.
dr- whateva nigga!

(allen passes tawanna the keys to his car)

t- what am i suppossed to do with this?
a- go home.
t- what?
a- go home.
t- allen i am not leaving without you!
a- I SAID GO HOME NOW!!!
t- ok, ok!

(they hug and kiss)

a- no matter what goes down hear tonite, whether i make it or not.---------
t- allen dont say that!
a- no i am serious, if i dont make it you better take care of my kids.
t- allen im not leaving you!!!!!
a- GET IN THE DAMN CAR AND GO HOME!
dr- yea you better get in the car be4 I shoot your ass!

(tawanna and sheka drive back to ai and tawanna's house)

a- so what yall niggas gonna do to me? If you gonna shoot my do it now.
dr- naw nigga, we aint trying to kill you. cuz if we do all philly gonna be cummin afta our asses. Thats the only reason you aint been shot yet.
a- so what you want? season tickets to the sixers? a car? a house?
to- naw nigga, cuz if we take that s*** niggas gonna be all on our ass trying to get something big like that.
dr- just give us everything in ya pockets and we will let you go.
to- what u doing man.
dr- we aint got no need to kill dis nigga tony. he got 2 kids and a wife to take care of and even im not mean enough to do dat s***.
to- ok whateva. empty ya pockets nigga.

allen gives them $500, one of his cell phones and his 2 way.(glad that he left his wallet with his real money in the car)tony and dre leave.

now he is standing in the middle of the street by himself, no money and basically stranded in the dark. then some hedlights pull up beside him. Its tawanna in his bentley. tawanna gets out the car crying and hugging and kissing him.

t- baby i was so scared i dont know what i would do if i eva lost you!
a- why the fucc you disobey me! I told you i had some good reasons 4 you to stay put!

****Meanwhile back w/ tony and dre*******

to- that nigga lucky we let him go.
dr- its okay cuz i got somethin else in store.
to- and whats thats?
dr- i cant wait 4 us to get his wife by herself.......
to- oh so thats how it going down...
(he says knowing what he is thinking)
dr- oh 4 sho!

****thanx 4 reading*****
**** I know its short! sorry!******
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 22, 2002 6:07 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I LIKE THIS.

[ November 21, 2002: Message edited by: allen_iverson's_mistress ]
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 23, 2002 1:44 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

here goes a little more of the story:

allen and tawanna patch things up and about a week later allen goes to derek house (will 2). he tells them about what happened wit tony and dre.

w- 4 reel thats what happened?
a- yea
d- but you aint gotta worry about them niggas anymore.
a- why?
w- oh, cuz they dead man.
a- what??!!!??
d- yea they both got shot at the club like a couple days ago because the messed wit dis nigga girl.'
a- dang thats fucced up!
d- shut up man cuz u know you happy as hell!
a- naw not 4 somebody dying, but i am happy that they cant mess wit my family no more.
d- yea, that is one good thing that came out of them crokin!

allen goes home to tell tawanna the news

t- 4 reel? they dead?
a- yea, thats what derek and will told me.
t- dang that is funny how you can see somebody like a week before and then you find out they dead that quick.
a- yea, its scary.

the next day the iversons wake up and are just chillin around the house. tawanna painting her nails, allen reading sports illustrated magazine, tiaura and deuce sitting in tiaura's room coloring the walls.
tawanna walks in and sees what there up to.

t- allen come and see what your kids have been doing!
allen comes running
a- what?
tawanna points to the wall.
a- why did yal do that??!!!
ti- daddy, we were sick of coloring books so me and deuce figured that my walls were to plain so we wanted to add some color to it.
a- add some color to it?
deuce- yea daddy.
a- CLEAN THIS MESS UP NOW!
t- yea and yall better do a good job or ya daddy gonna beat ya ass!

tawanna gets the cleaning supplies and tiaura and deuce clean up the mess. then the door bell rings and tawanna answers the door.
there is a delivery man at the door.

dm- ummm roses and chocolates for tawanna iverson.
t- yea thats me. who are they from.
dm- the person who sent them asked me to not tell you.

then tawanna takes the roses and closes the door.

a- who was at the door?
t- umm a delivery man said somebody sent me these white roses and chocolates.
a- who are they from?
t- ummm... i dont know.
a- let me see this s*** cuz i wanna know who the fucc sending my wife some damn roses.

he grabs the chocolates and roses out of tawanna's hand and reads the note that is attached out loud.

a- to my beautiful wife, who i love and adore. from allen.

tawanna snatches the card from him and reads it.

t- allen thank you so much baby!
a- just a little something to show you that i love you!
t- oh, baby that is so sweet!
a- oh, and the man that sent you all this s*** wanted me to give you these.

tawanna takes what allen held in his hand, to realize that they are front row tickets to a patti labelle concert.

t- oh baby! thank you so much you know how much i love patti!
a- yea thats why i wanted to take you to see her.
t- you are so sweet!
a- i know. but i wanted to do something nice 4 you cuz i know our life has been nothing but drama these last couple of months, so i wanted to give you something to show you that you are still the lady i love.
t- allen i cant believe you did all this for me, so why dont we go upstairs and i can show you just how much i apprieciate this.
a- okay, i feel you on that!

they walk up to tiaura's door to see that her and deuce have finished cleaning up the walls and are now watching t.v.

t- tiaura watch your brother, and you need me or daddy knock on our room door okay sweetie?
deuce- how many times i gotta say ima a grown man and i dont need nobody watching me?
t- oh shut up you crazy little boy, cuz u need somebody to watch you as long as i say you do.

allen tells tawanna to come on.

ti- ok mommy but what are you and daddy going to do?
t- ummm... me and daddy are going to talk.
ti- okay.

tawanna and allen get to there room door.

a- why you lie to me baby 4?(playin)
t- what you want me to tell her? that mommy and daddy are going in there room so that daddy can beat!!!
a- naw, you told her exactly the right thing!
t- umm hmmmm...
a- iight now show me how much you appreciate the stuff i bought 4 you!
t- iight!

**** as i always say...if ya feeling the story let me know****
*****add on if ya want*****
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 23, 2002 4:27 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

hey nieceye_n_iverson thas some hott stuff you be writin keep doing your thing and keep it ai and h block!!
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chrisann
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 23, 2002 6:26 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I can't wait to see what happen next....Keep it up girl You get Two thumbs and my big toes up.
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 23, 2002 9:54 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Damn nieceye,this story is tight girl..keep it up ma.

~*~MizD~*~
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 23, 2002 10:58 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

please finish this story and people by all means if someone does or say something you dont like remember ignore them and keep going dont waste time replying to them cause all those words used replying could be going to your part of the story

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actually quit hating for actually haters are quiters
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 24, 2002 6:02 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

somebody pleez add on.
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 24, 2002 10:45 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I'm go add on as soon as I think of something good.
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 24, 2002 11:28 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

( we all know that u know what happens next)

a- no interruptions, I wonder what them kids is up to?
t- yea it has been a little quiet.
a- not really.
t- shut up, and go check on ya kids.
a- why I gotta go?
t-(gives him a look)
a-iight I'm going, I'm going...

(when Allen goes in Tiaura's room, he doesn’t see the kids.)

a- Where the hell are those kids at?Tiaura? Deuce? Where y'all at?

( a.i runs down stairs getting a little scared now.)

a- yo stop playing this ain't funny, come out from where y'all at now!

( tawanna hears yelling and comes downstairs)

t- what’s going on?
a- ya kids playing around.
t- where they at?
a- I don't know, I called they name and they acting like they can't hear, and when I do find them I gonna start whooping some ass.
t- well let me go, check back upstairs.
a- iight I'll go check the theatre room ( u know everyone on Cribs has one)

( tawanna and Allen go looking through the whole house and they don't find the kids)

t-(starting to get worried) they know not to go outside by themselves
a- we woulda heard them if they was outside.
t- where are my kids at?
a- T calm down , don't start trippin they just playing a game that’s all. Ok kids stop playing, come out from where u are now. Daddy and mommy are getting scared.

( Allen looks and sees that door is unlocked and that it's cracked a little bit)

a- T did u close and lock the door?
t- yea I always do, why?
a- look (points to the door)
t- Allen u don't think?
a- people is crazy nowadays, and u know it's a lot of people plotting on me---
t- they got my kids! Allen they stole the kids!
a- ok, ok , just calm down we can just call the cops and then they'll get it all straightened out
t- call them, call them right now.

( just when Allen is going to pick up the phone ,it rings)

a-hello?
p-are u missing something?
a- who the hell is this?
p- Mr. Iverson , calm down, no need to get upset, the kids are fine, and they'll stay that way if u cooperate.
a-who is this?
p-u have what we want, and we have what u want, so lets just trade and things will be fine.
t- who is it?
a- they have the kids?
t-who is they?
a- I don't know, just go get my cell and call the cops.
p-Mr. Iverson I wouldn't advise my wife to do that unless u want something to happen to your kids.
a- you touch my fucking kids and I will kill u .
p-not if I kill u first, would it make u happy to talk to the children?
a- yes,
p-any questions regarding location and that's it.
a- ok, ok , ok
p- son our daughter?
a-both
p-make a decision
a-daughter
p-ok

ti- Hi daddy!
a-hey baby are u and ur brother ok?
ti- yes, can we come home now?
a- yea u can
ti- are u gonna come get us?
a- yes me, mommy, and grandma. We're all gonna come get you.
ti-ok, the man said that I have to give him the phone
a-ok . tell ur brother I said to behave, and listen to what the people tell u to do.
ti-ok
a-I love you
p-awww so sweet, I would advise ur wife to sit down if I was u.
a- wait u can see us?
p-no more questions, we have to go now, don't try anything stupid. If u don't want anything to happen.
a- can u see us?
p-maybe, we'll call back later, just to see how things are going.
a- don't hurt my kids.
p- don't worry I won't, u just relax, this is gonna be a long day.

[ November 24, 2002: Message edited by: Ivy'sSk8terChik ]
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 24, 2002 11:52 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was good SUSPENSE SUSPENSE GOOD GOOD GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 24, 2002 11:56 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

oh my GOD...I feel like this has really happened..Ifeel scared as hell right now.To whom ever continues the story please let Alland and Tawanna get their kids back because this is some really mysterious s***..

~*~MizD~*~
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 25, 2002 12:47 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Ya'll asses can write some good ass s***! Look out E. Lynn Harris and Eric Jerome Dickey! Mad props and much love!!! This s*** is da bomb! Somebody has to keep it going.
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 25, 2002 2:02 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

the story was so hott! oh my god i dont even wanna continue cuz i dont wanna mess it up... but i will because i dont wanna keep the people waitng so here goes:

(allen looking scared and angry)

t- allen what is it? ALLEN!!!
a- somebody has our kids.
t- who? how did they get them? when will we see them again?
a- i dont know.
t- allen what are we gonna do? I want my kids now!
a- calm down baby.
t- dont tell me to calm down. I am going crazy because i dont know where my damn kids are... whoever has them better not do anything to them or...
a- stop. i think they are watching us.
t- what?
a- i think they are watching us.
t- who the fucc is they allen? If i dont get my kids soon...
a- shhhhh...
(allen saying to himself
a- if they can see us then they...

(the phone rings again, allen answers it on the first ring)

a- hello?
p- oh so i see that youre a little scared are u?
a- look what do you want from me man?
p- look, if you wanna see your kids your better drop the damn attitude now.
a- okay,okay.
p- now...like i said earlier, i would advise your wife to sit down if i was you...
a- tawanna sit down.
t- why?
a- i said sit down.
(tawanna sits down)
a- okay man can you see us.
p- well...
a- can u fuccing see us?
p- yea.
a- can u hear us too?
p- yea were on the phone.
a- look bitch i mean when were not on the phone.
p- well... yea.
a- how?
p- what kind of ass do you take me 4? Thats all i'm telling you.
a- what do you want from me?
p- ummmmmm.... i think ill keep that to myself a little longer...
a- ok, just pleez can i talk to my son?
p- well i guess so you got 30 seconds.
deuce- hey daddy, are you coming yet?
a- not yet son.
d- well pleez hurry up cuz i dont like it here. These men look dirty and they breath stink. pleez hurry up daddy.
a- i will son, but it is gonna be a little while... be good for daddy ok.
d- ok.
(the dude gets the phone back)
p- ok now listen up... you call the police and you dont see your kids again its as simple as that you understand?
a- yea but what do you want from...

(the dude hangs up on ai)

t- baby tell me the kids are okay.
a- yea they alright but i dont know how long they gonna stay that way.
t- i am calling the cops (she moves toward the phone)
a- no you can't.
t- baby we have to.
a- we cant tawanna. if we do they said we dont see our kids again... plus we dont have enough information to tell the cops anyway.
t- the could tap the phones or something! I want my children allen!
a- be careful what you say... they can hear us.


********Okay, theres a little more*******
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 25, 2002 2:55 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Thanks nieyce,you got it too.

t-(looking scared) they can see and hear us?
a- yes.
t-what did they say?
a- nothing, we just have to play it cool ok.
t-but all-
a-Tawanna listen to me, I don't know who these people are, or what they're capable of, so we're not gonna do anything to piss them off , u got me?
t- yes
a- ok so lets just sit here and chill until they call back
t- baby, I'm scared
a-me too.

(the phone rings again,tawanna answers it)
a- no gimme the phone
t- hello?
m-hey where’s ma son at?
t- oh hey ma, he's right here, but he's kind of busy, so
m- he ain't never to busy for him mama, give him the phone.
(Allen snatches the phone)
a-hey mama
m-what u doing baby? u sound kind of worried.
a-ma please, I'm fine, just a little tired.
m-well where are my grand kids?
a-the kids, uh,the kids.
m-yea u know deuce and ti,where they at? It seems kind of quiet over there.
a-they at Tawanna’s girl's house she got 2 kids around they age, so they over there for today.
m-well I just called to see what was up, maybe I'll stop by later.
a-NO! um, I mean no, me and tawanna tryna chill today while the kids gone.
m-ok, ok, well I guess I'll talk to y'all black folks later.
a-ok, bye mama, I love u.
m-love u too chuck, bye.

(Allen hangs up the phone, and sits on the couch. Tawanna stands for a minute before sitting by her husband. The phone rings again.)

a- hello?
p-your'e a very nice liar Mr. Iverson. But u want to do urself a favor?
a-what?
p-keep the line clear.
a-ok.
p-and another thing if I was u I wouldn't get to cozy with my wife u know what happened last time.
a-fucc u.
p-no I'm afraid, that won't be necessary.u wanna know something?
a-what?
p-your daughter is the cutest thing I've seen in a long time. She has such pretty hair and I must say she gets her eyes from you.
a-(Allen cringes at the sound of this man talking about his daughter like that) what do u want from me?
p-don't ask questions, I ask all the questions, and I AM MAKING ALL OF THE SHOTS! do we have and understanding?
a-yes
p-u see Mr. Iverson I know that u have a hard time responding to authority, but hopefully this will change that.
a-who are u? what do u want? why did u take my children?
p-awww, is Mr. tough guy getting scared? I never thought that I'd live to see the day that ALLEN IVERSON would get scared of someone, especially little ol' me.
a-can we just get this over with, so I can get my kids back?
p-yea, oh tell ur wife I see her reaching for the cell phone, put it back.

(Allen turns around and sees Tawanna he gives her a look. She puts the cell phone back and sits down)

a-listen ,is it money that u want? what? tickets? what?
p-u really wanna know the truth?
a-yes, I do.
p-lets make a trade.
a-ok
p-it seems someone on my staff has a thing for that pretty little wife of yours.
a-my wife?
(tawanna looks up and gets scared)
p-yes u see, here's the deal. In order for u to get u children back, we must have your wife.
a-so either way I loose?
p-no not necessarily, you will get your children and your wife back eventually.
a-when
p-u see that’s the thing, we haven't figured that out yet, but when we do we'll call you. Why don't u turn on the t.v., that's a nice flat screen u have.
a-don't hurt them
p-bye,and oh yea the person that wants ur wife wanted me to tell u, u should be careful who u push in malls next time.

(Allen turns around and looks at T)

t-what did they say?
a-they want u
t-me?
a- yes tawanna u, in order to get the kids back we have to make a trade. Them for u.
t- Allen no
a-look, u know that I would never let anything happen to u ,so don't worry. We are all gonna be together again. I promise.
t-u sure about this?
a-yes, for now just sit and pray that the kids are ok.

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PostPosted: Mon Nov 25, 2002 3:06 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

OOOOHHHHHHHHH OH MY GOD PLEASE DO NOT STOP NOW CONTINUE PLEASE IT IS GETTIN SO TYTE YA'LL GOT SKILLS PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!!!!!!!!!
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 25, 2002 4:21 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

girl it just gets more exciting by the second. you are doing an excellent job.

t- allen what exactly do you mean they want me? in what way?
a- guess they wanna you know...
t- oh my god!
a- its okay cuz aint no nigga gonna mess wit my wife.
t- i have 2.
a- what?????
t- i have to.
a- no you dont-
t- allen i am a grown woman and i can take care of myself but those kids cant.
a- there gotta be another way... we can just be patient and see how things turn out.
t- allen we dont know how much longer they are gonna be patient with our kids. i have to do this 4 my babies.
a- i dont know about this baby.
t- hold up, did they give you any clue about who they could be?
a- well yea, the dude that wanted you wanted 2 let me know that i better watch who i push in the mall.
t- oh no not that bitch ass nigga!
a- keep in mind they can hear and see us.

the phone rings an it is allen's friend derek.

a- hello?
d- damnb boy why you sounding all scared and s***?
a- look man i am busy and i cant talk right now so bye.

allen hangs up.

t- who was that?
a- oh, that was derek.
t- oh, what now?
a- i guess just sit and wait for the next phone call.

like an 2 hour passes.

t- damn allen why havent they called?
a- i dont know.

the phone rings and it is the kiddnappers.

a- hello?
p- have you made your dedcision yet?
a- yea and yal aint getting my wife.
p- (tells other kiddnapper) kill the kids.
a- NO WAIT DONT KILL MY KIDS!!!
p- leave the kids alone jamie. so whats it gonna be allen?
allen looks at tawanna. she nods her head.

a- okay you can have my wife.
p- okay this is how its gonna be. i talk you $listen. at 7:30 i want your wife and $4,000 at the end of the block. we will give you your kids then and we will take your wife. you have 1 hour and 1/2 to get the money and 2 get down with your wife before me and my boys do, so use your time wisely.
a- u want 4000 dollars and my wife?
p- yea it would be 10000 but u are lucky i am in a good mood.and when u come dont try any s*** because i will have a gun out and i am not afraid to use it.

the man hangs up the phone.

t- so?
a- 7:30.

well 7:30 rolls around and the men are already out there.

a- okay now were here.
p- send your wife 1st and when she gets 1/2 to use we will send your kids and remember dont rty no s***.

allen and tawanna hug and kiss and the switch is made and be4 tawanna gets in the car with the men she yells:

t-ALLEN I LOVE U!!!
a- I LOVE U TOO!
a- when do i get to see my wife again?
p- u will see her in about a week. and remember we are still watching u so u better not call the cops.

tawanna and the men leave.

t- daddy where is mommy going?
a- she has to go take care of something.
deuce- when do we get to see her again daddy?
a- soon son. soon.

allen and ti, and deuce go home.

****as i always, if you are feeling it let me know****
*****ivy's sk8ter chik i think we make a really good team and u got madd skills!****
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 25, 2002 5:02 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

i only gotta couple of things to say to my best friend (nieceye_n_iverson) you got madd skillz it is gettin better than ours and you and the sk8rchic got all of the audience at the tips of our seats yall keep up the good work and be real no si should say stay real!!!
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 25, 2002 7:25 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

In the car there is four guys and they all have ski mask on. She was sittin in between the two of the guys so she couldnt jump out. She tried to be a soldier but she wanted to cry cause she didnt think she was gonna see her man or her kids again then she thought about what they might make her do. (In Allens car) he calles Derek and gives him a quick report and tells him to re up cause some s*** bout to go down. He is worried sick bout Tee and wants to move as fast as he can to get her back. He pulls into his driveway and goes in the house wit the kids to come up wit a plan. The kidnappers pulled to the side and blindfolded her then turned around. They rode back to the abandoned building, down the street from AI house that they was hidin out in the first time. They tied her to the chair and put tape on her mouth. Jaime takes off his mask and looks at the monitors to see AI on the couch wit his kids. Jaime's boy Boo comes in.

B- Yo man what we goin do wit this broad you said you was just goin scare the nigga?
J- Nigga just sit down and shut up damn!
D Roc- Yo nigga you den losted ya fuckin mind what the hell we goin do now this wasnt how the s*** was suppose to go you said we was goin get the money and dropped the bitch off somewhere I aint goin down for no crazy s***.
J- I got it under control stop pressin me, plus dat bitch shouldnt have dissed me and this would have all been avoided.
Jason- Nigga you trippin over some pussey, I knew you was fucked up int he head.
Jaime- Look, its the principality of the muthafuckin issue and if yall scared ass bitches wanna leave then be out but you aint gettin s*** if you leave!
D- f*** dat we aint come all dis way for nothin, so whats the game plan?
Jaime- We goin let him sweat for awhile, trust me I know what im doin but you know what yall niggas can do go get some food s*** a nigga hungry.While they were arguin Tawanna though about how they got in her house then she remembered the maintanence man comin to repair a overblown light, it was them settin up the cameras. It was all comin to her now so she had to do somethin quick.
Jason, D-Roc and Boo put there coats on and they went to get some grub. Jaime turns to Tawanna and takes off the tape and scarf.
T- Why are you doin this to us?
He smacks her and her face turns red.
J- Bitch you know why, you think ya ass to cute to give a nigga the time of day and since you didnt wanna f*** wit me now im fuckin wit you.
Tears streamed down her cheek and he wiped them off.
J- Dont cry, im not goin hurt you, well maybe a lil, he smiled and sat back down.
A half went pass and he wss wonderin where his boys was so he called Boo cell. While he was callin Tawanna got into her back pocket and slid the phone out. (While they were makin the switch she grabbed her phone and put it in he back pocket.)He had his back turned to her so she felt around on the numbers and hit #1 then the talk button ( you must become 1 wit your phone, lol).
The phone rung at the house and Allen jumped. He looked at the ID first and realized it was her. He knew somethin was up so he put it on speakerphone and whispered baby im here. She heard him and knew she had to do what she had to do before his boys came back.
T- Jaime.
He turned around and came over to her
J- What?
T- If all you want is to f*** me why am I still tied up?
J- Not yet, it aint time.
T- Time, time for what I mean why are you makin this such a big deal you kidnap my kids then me all to prove a point why?
J- Ya man shouldnt have put his hands on me and ya slimy ass shouldnt have played hard on me but its bout to be over so dont worry.
T- I mean it was smart how yall got into my house by sayin you was the maintanence man, but I dont understand why you got me in this shitty ass abandoned buildin, goin though all this trouble because of somethin so dumb. He looked at her suspiciously then at the screen but Allen was lookin staright ahead playin wit the kids while hearin them the whole time.
J- At first it wasnt no big thing at first we was just goin shake yall up a bit wit the kids get some money and roll out but then that wasnt enough.
T- So fuckin me will be?
J- Maybe
T- So what im suppose to just let you do whatever you want to me, (she looks over and sees a crate that says Gladwyne winery and she realizes shes right down the street from her house,)then that be it I mean what nigga?
J- No im a make ya man sweat for awhile.
He dialed the number and she quickly said who you callin so AI could hang up before he got through which he did.
J- So nigga how you feelin?
A- Why you playin, wheres my wife?
J- Shes fine so what you goin do to get her back?
A- Hold up wait you said you wasnt goin hurt her and you was goin let her go....
J- See now dat I got you right where I want you the stakes have goin up so nigga put ya gameface on.
A- Can I at least talk to her?
He came over to her and she slid the cellphone up her sleeve.
T-Allen
A- Tee u aight, he aint hurt you did he?
T- No baby im fine stop worryin, listen just think about last night when we were drinkin wine and havin fun remember?
(Allen a lil puzzled at first and he doesnt get it)
T- Remember the wine the neighbors brung us before the moved, that night thats what im talkin bout before ( keep up, notice she said before).
J- Ok thats it, I'll call back within the hour to discuss the deal. He hangs up and Allen sits down and thinks about everything that was said.
T- So when you goin untie me?
J- For what?
T- Look I know you want me you wouldnt have goin through all this if you didnt so lets just do this. (She hits 1 again and talk so allen would pick up, he hit speakerphone again and listened. By now he had fugiured out where she was and was ready to move he was just waitin for the right time.)

Jaime, horny as can be, unties her but keeps a tight grip on her. She manages to slid the phone back into her pocket before he notices and he is kissin all over her. Allen hears this and makes a run for it, he puts the kids in the car and calls D. They meet up at the end of the block and D is armed and ready. He puts the kids in D car and D sister Keisha pulls off.


Just as Jaime is bout to climb on her she knees him in his balls and he falls over in pain. She runs but its barley any light and not realizing what door she was goin to she runs right into his boys. Boo grabs her and they tie he rback up. Jaime smacked the hell out of her again and massages his balls. When he turns around and looks at the screen Allen is gone and he knew somethin was up.
J- s*** hes on the move we gotta get outta here.
Boo- Aint like he no where we at damn nigga chill.
J- Nigga we cant see him so now he got control so we gotta move stash the bitch on the turnpike somewhere. They started packin up and ALLEN AND DEREK PULL UP SLOW WIT THE LIGHTS OFF. They get out and creep around to the back. They look through the window and see them packin up. Allen seen Tee cryin and was pissed he was ready to f*** some s*** up.
Derek- Yo they bought to roll we gotta do dis before they get her out. Allen took the gun and D snatched it back.
D- Nigga I got dis you cant catch a charge foolin wit these muthafuckas.
A-So what if they start blastin, I need some heat too nigga.
D gives it to him and they slid in the window that was cracked. They crept around til the gained postion then went in.
D- Aight muthafuckas put ya muthafuckin hands up for I blast you silly bitches. He had the infared shinin and Jaime and them couldnt do nothin but do as he said. Bubba go get ya girl. He went and untied Tee and they went outside. By the time they got to the car all they heard was gunshots blarrin.
A- s*** I gotta go back
T- Allen No, Please!
A- Baby dats my boy he might be hurt, just duck down and dont move.
He ran back to the side but before he could go in D ran out.
D- Lets Go.
They got in the car and pulled off. Tawanna was shakin up cause she never heard gunshots up close like dat before so she was shakin.Allen put his arms around her and they rode back to D house. Once there they..................keep it goin im tired of writin my fingers hurt lol



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PostPosted: Mon Nov 25, 2002 2:38 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was real tight gurl!!!! keep up the excellent work.

******i'll continue this afternoon yall******
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 2:35 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I'm lost from here, Nieceye can u help guide a sistah? Thanks! Peace
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 2:49 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was tite abg3
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 2:50 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ok ima continue:

They all get back to derek's house. ai calls derek's sister kesha and tells her to bring tiaura and deuce back to derek's house.

a- thanx keshia, were they good?
k- no. they are some crazy kids.
a- i know, but thanx.
k- your welcome but i gotta go so later.
a- iight.
keshia leaves.
t- what do we do now allen?
a- well we cant stay at home...
t- i know but what are we gonna do we gotta keep the kids safe.
allen thinking...
a- okay. we go home and get about a weeks worth of clothes then we gonna go stay with mamma. we cant stay home because they still got them camera in they house. after we have been with my mother 4 2 days, derek, you get Will and yall go to the crib and search for the cameras.
t- but shouldnt we call police and have them search the house?
a- everything is to heated for that. we gotta wait till everything cools off because them nigga's are gonna be watching our house. we gotta get our clothes as soon as possible then head straight to mamma's house. we gotta lay low for a while.
t- okay chuck, whateva we gotta do to protect the kids.

tawanna, allen and the kids all go home get their stuff together and go to ann's house.

a- hey mamma. do you mind if me tawanna and the kids stay with you for a little while?
ann- no i dont mind but for what?
a- ill tell you when we get inside.
ann- good tell me over dinner (whatever time it is).
a- okay.
they are all sitting down at the table eating.

a- now tell me whats going on.

allen tells him mamma what happened with jamie, the kiddnapping, them getting tawanna and etc.

ann- all that happened?
a- yea.
ann- why didnt you tell me when i called?
a- i didnt wanna worry you ma.
ann- well if something like this happens again you betta tell me or ima beat ya ass boy.
a- (laughing)
ann- is not funny. i raised you 4 18 years and i need to know if you are in trouble.
a- okay ma. but on the real... if you dont feel safe or you dont want us to stay here and put you in danger... i understand.
ann- boy now you talking crazy. you know damn well i dont mind. you are my son, my blood. and these are my grandchildren. i want to be with you through all of this because i love. if something happens to you, it is gonna happen to me to because we're family.
a- iight ma. you know i luv you for that.
ann- umm hmmm, i love you to.
a- aiight kids, its been a long day and its time for yall to get some sleep.
ti-and-deuce- ahhhhh...daddy!
a- time 4 yall to go to sleep.
ti- but i dont wanna!
de- me either!
a- its either sleep or an ass whipping!
ti-and-d- okay daddy we're going!

tawanna goes upstairs and puts the kids to sleep in one of the guest rooms. Then she lays down in another guest room thinking about how crazy and messed up her life has been these last couple of days. Then allen comes up to the guest room and gets in the bed. they both lay there in the dark & silence for about 15 minutes.

a- baby, you awake?
t- yea.
a- but on the real. did jamie fucc you?
t- no. than god he didnt! he was trying to when you snd derek came.
a- i heard him kissing you when i was on the phone.
t- oh. but he didn't do nothing like that to me. why you wanna know?
a- oh because i dont think i could handle another nigga doing my wife.
t- well im glad you came to my rescue because thats what he would have done if you wouldnt have come.
a- im glad i did 2.
t- allen?
a- yea.
t- i am so scared. (crying)
a- dont cry (holding her)i promise you i will protect you and my children. even if i die trying.
t- allen dont say that because i dont know what i would do if i ever lost you.
a- well if it means i die trying to protect my family then so be it.
t- allen??!!....
a- okay, lets just leave it at that. we gonna get through this be we gotta take it one day at a time.
t- okay.
a- i love you teedee.
t- i love you to chuck.

(they fall asleep in each others arms)

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PostPosted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 6:11 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

the next morning, Allen is out running around. He left tawanna and the kids with Ann at the house. It's the morning time and Ann and tawanna are cleaning the kitchen (they just ate breakfast.)

Ann catches tawanna staring out of the window.

a-are u ok?
t-huh? yea I'm fine.
a-u are a true solider u know that right?
t-thanks.that means a lot.
a-yes, I'm still a little mad that u and my son couldn't come tell me--
t-mama, I'm sorry but they said that if we told anyone they would hurt the kids and I know that u wouldn't want anything to happen to ya grand babies.
a-I understand, Allen told me all about it. But it seems a little strange.
t-what's so strange? They came into our home and kidnapped our children, I'm pretty sure that it happens everyday, but it has never really hit that close to home until (getting a little teary eyed)yesterday.
a-but I don't understand it, why would someone go through all that trouble just to get to you?
t-(tawanna turns around looking confused)excuse me?
a-you heard me. I think that you brought this all on yourself.
t-what?
a-this man went through all this drama, kidnapping your kids, setting up cameras, breaking into your home, going through a gun fight just to get to you.
t-ann, I know that u are my husband's mother, and because I have love for him and I respect u I am trying to hold my tongue.
a-please don’t, because Lord knows I am not going to hold mines.
t- you went from commending me, to insulting me within a span of 5minutes, is that some kind of record?
a- don't dare try and get smart with me. Not only have u put my son in danger, but u also endangered the life of my grand children. I always knew that u were no good ever since the day Allen told me u were pregnant, I’ve had my doubts.
t- are you trying to say that I brought all this on myself?
a-I'm saying that and then some.
t-well please elaborate
a-my baby could've finished school if it wasn't for u.
t-what? Allen leaving Georgetown was his decision not mines, he decided that on his own. We woulda been fine, but he also took into consideration that his sister needed a specialist, and the fact that he was sick of seeing you struggle. He did that for u too so don't sit up here and try and place the blame on me.
a-who do u think that you're fooling? I am no dummy I know u couldn't wait to get pregnant by my son,u saw him and u saw dollar signs, u just couldn't wait to be the ALLEN IVERSON'S baby's mother could you.
t-are you trying to say I trapped him?
a-take it as you want to, u know what I am telling you. Next time you wanna mess around, don't bring the lives of my family into it.
t-you've made your point.

Tawanna goes and looks at her children, she gets a little teary eyed and goes upstairs in her room and starts to cry. Allen comes back)

a-hey y'all two being good?
d and Ti- shhh daddy Spongebob.
a- I'll take that as a yes.
(Allen goes in the kitchen and gives his mommy a kiss on the cheek)

a-hey mama where's tee?
m-upstairs
a-lemme go see what she's up to

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PostPosted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 7:05 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

this is getting good!..please continue...take care and god bless,answer_ai
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chrisann
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 8:15 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I'm like glued to the screen....damn this story is tight.... but damn now my eyes hurting me..I'mma go rest dem now.
KEEP IT UP

[ November 26, 2002: Message edited by: ChrissyloveAI ]
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AllensBabyGirl3
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 9:05 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

...looking out the window cryin.
A- BABY WHATS WRONG?
SHE TURNED AROUND AND LOOKED AT HIM.
T- DO YOU THINK I HELD YOU BACK?
A- HELD ME BACK FROM WHAT?
T- FINISHIN COLLEGE, SEEIN OTHER GIRLS, HAVIN A LIFE.
A- T YOU KNEW THE SITUATION WIT SCHOOL, I HAD TO DO WHAT I HAD TO DO AND I HAD MY GIRL SO WHAT DID I WANNA SEE OTHER GIRLS FOR WHERE IS THIS COMIN FROM?
T- DO YOU THINK THAT I TRAPPED YOU OR PRESSURED YOU WHEN I GOT PREGNANT WIT T?
A- NO, TIAURA IS MY BABYGIRL I NEVER ONCE FELT TRAPPED WHY YOU ASKIN ME DIS?
T- DO YOU THINK IT WAS MY FAULT WHAT HAPPEN?
A- WHY YOU ASKIN ME ALL THESE DAMN QUESTIONS!
T- BECAUSE JUST ANSWER THE DAMN QUESTION!
A- I TOLD YOU ABOUT GOIN OFF WITHOUT NO SECURITY WIT YOU BUT KNOW I DONT THINK IT WAS YA FAULT THE NIGGA WAS CRAZY.
T- SHE TURNED AND LOOKED BACK OUT THE WINDOW.
I CANT STAY HERE, IM GOIN TO DESHAWN'S HOUSE TIL THE HOUSE IS READY.
A- WHY WHAT HAPPEN, WHY YOU TALKIN CRAZY?
T- IM TALKIN CRAZY, YOU NEED TO TALK TO YA MOM THEN YOU WILL FIND OUT WHO TALKIN CRAZY. SHE GRABBED HER COAT AND WENT DOWNSTAIRS.
T- TIAURA, DUECE COME ON.
THEY PUT THERE COATS ON AND SHE GOT HER KEYS.
A- TAWANNA, WILL YOU SLOW DOWN DAMN WHAT THE f*** IS WRONG WIT YOU?
T- IM NOT STAYIN HERE, SHE MAY BE YOUR MOTHER BUT SHE HAD NO RIGHT TO TALK TO ME LIKE DAT I WILL BE AT D'S.
HER AND THE KIDS GOT IN HER JEEP AND SHE PULLED OFF. ALLEN SLAMMED THE DOOR AND WENT IN THE KITCHEN.
B(BUBBA)- MA WHAT YOU SAY TO HER?
A- FIRST OF ALL DONT BE SLAMMIN MY DOOR RUNNIN AFTER DAT SILLY GIRL.
B- MA, WHY YOU ACTIN LIKE DAT?
A- ACTIN LIKE WHAT THIS MY DAMN HOUSE, I CAN SAY WHATEVER THE HELL I WANT TO IN MY HOUSE IF SHE DONT LIKE IT THEN LIKE SHE DID SHE CAN LEAVE.
B- MA, WHEN YOU GOIN REALIZE SHE MY WIFE, YOU CANT KEEP MAKIN ME CHOOSE.
A- WHO SAID I WAS MAKIN YOU CHOOSE, IT OBVIOUS YOU ALREADY DID!
B- MA I ASKED YOU FOR YA BLESSIN BEFORE I ASKED HER AND YOU SAID YOU WAS COOL WIT IT NOW LATELY YOU BE TALKIN BOUT HOW I SHOULDNT HAVE MARRIED HER (AND SHOULD HAVE MARRIED TEE, SORRY I GOT CARRIED AWAY BACK TO THE STORY)
A- I NEVER SAID I LIKED HER, I LIKE HER CAUSE SHE MAKES YOU HAPPY AND SHE GAVE YOU THOSE BEAUTIFUL BABIES BUT THATS IT. I JUST TOLD HER HOW I FELT IT AINT MY FAULT SHE CRY ABOUT EVERY DAMN THING.
B- MOM, YOU KNOW HOW SHE IS, THEN THIS s*** DAT JUST HAPPENED GOT HER TRIPPIN EVEN MORE YOU PUTTIN ME IN A CRAZY SITUATION SHE GOIN THINK IM TAKIN YA SIDE AND BE MAD AT ME.
A- WELL IM YA MAMA, I RAISED YOU SO SHE NEEDS TO KNOW THAT. AND IT WOULDNT HAVE BEEN NO SITUATION IF SHE WASNT WALKIN ROUND LIKE SHE WAS BETTER THAN THE WORLD.
B- WHAT DID YOU SAY?
A- YOU KNOW I KEEP IT REAL AND I TOLD HER SHE BRUNG IT ON HERSELF AND I DIDNT APPRECIATE HER PUTTIN MY BABY AND THOSE KIDS IN HER MESS AND I TOLD HER SHE WAS THE REASON YOU LEFT SCHOOL
B- MOM, YOU KNOW DAT AINT RIGHT?
A- WHY AINT IT, SO SIT HERE AND TELL ME RIGHT NOW THAT IF TAWANNA DIDNT GET HER FAST ASS PREGNANT YOU WOULD HVAE DROPPED OUT OF SCHOOL AND WENT PRO SO EARLY AND YOU WOULD MARRY HER.
B- I MIGHT HAVE STAYED IN SCHOOL BUT YOU KNOW I DID WHAT I DID FOR ALL OF US NOT JUST HER AND MA YOU GOTTA UNDERSTAND THAT REGARDLESS SHES MRS IVERSON TOO NOW AND I CANT HAVE YALL GOIN AT IT LIKE DIS ALL THE TIME.
SHE LOOKED AT HIM LIKE HE WAS CRAZY
A- AND WHAT THE HELL IS THAT SUPPOSE TO MEAN, YOU TAKIN UP FOR HER IM YA MOTHER IF IT WASNT FOR ME YOU WOULDNT BE HERE. IM MRS. IVERSON SHES A RUNNER UP SO DONT MAKE IT SEEM LIKE I GOTTA RESPECT HER CAUSE SHE GOT DA NAME CAUSE IT CAN BE EASILY TAKIN AWAY!
B- MOM DATS THE POINT, YOU MAKIN ME CHOOSE BETWEEN YOU AND MY WIFE AND I CANT I LOVE BOTH OF YALL!
A- BOY WHO YOU THINK YOU HOLLERIN AT?
B- SORRY, IM JUST SAYIN CANT YALL JUST BE CIVIL TO EACH OTHER DATS ALL I ASK.
ANN CALMED DOWN AND HUGGED HIM.
A- BABY FOR YOU I WILL, YOU KNOW I JUST WANT WHATS BEST FOR YOU BUT I DONT WANT YOU TO BE UNHAPPY ON ACCOUNT OF ME SO TELL HER I APOLOGIZE FOR TELLIN HER MY FEELINGS. NEXT TIME I'LL KEEP THEM TO MYSELF.
B- I LOVE YOU MA.
A- I LOVE YOU TOO BUBBACHUCK.
THEY ATE TOGETHER THEN HE WENT TO D HOUSE TO TALK TO TAWANNA. WHEN HE GOT THERE SHE WAS ON THE PHONE. SHE DIDNT HEAR HIM COME IN SO SHE WAS STEADY TALKIN.
T- YEAH ITS BEEN ALOT GOIN ON AND I JUST BEEN STRESSED.
ON THE PHONE IS TYREE
TY- HOW BOUT I TAKE YOU OUT, WE HAVE SOME DINNER AND TALK ABOUT OLD TIMES
T- I DONT KNOW
TY- COME ON, I HAVENT SEEN YOU IN SO LONG.
T- AIGHT WHEN WE GOIN OUT?
TY- HOW BOUT TOMORROW?
T- OK, I'LL SEE YOU THEN TY'
TY- OK, I'LL CALL YOU TOMORROW
T- OK BYE
TY- BYE
SHE HANGS UP AND TURNS TO SEE ALLEN STANDIN THERE MAD AS HELL
T- (STUTTERIN)B.BBABBY WHEN DID YOU GET HERE?
A- WHO THE f*** WAS DAT?
T- MY GIRL JASMINE
A- DONT FUCKIN LIE I HEARD YOU SAY TY, YOU GOIN OUT WIT DAT NIGGA DA MORROW HUH?
T- HES A FRIEND DAMN, I DONT REMEMBER YOU FUCKIN MY MOTHER AND MAKIN ME NIGGA I CAN GO OUT WIT WHO I PLEASE AINT LIKE ITS DAT SERIOUS.
A- YOU KNOW WHAT f*** YOU, I KNEW YOU WASNT s***.
SHE STOOD UP AND WAS BOUT TO SMATCH HIM BUT HE GRABBED HER ARM AND PUSHED HER ON THE BED.
T- I CANT BELIEVE YOU!
A- I CANT BELIEVE YOU, AFTER THE s*** THAT WENT DOWN WIT DAT NIGGA JAIME YOU GOIN OUT WIT THIS CLOWN MY MOM WAS RIGHT.
T- f*** YOU AND YA MOM
HE WAS BOUT TO PUNCH THE s*** OUT OF HER WHEN HE STEPPED BACK
A- NO f*** YOU, YOU GO OUT WIT YA LIL FRIEND I DONT CARE IF HE BEATIN YA ASS DONT CALL ME. HE WALKED OUT AND SLAMMED THE DOOR. HE GOT THE KIDS AND SHE CAME OUT WHILE HE WAS STRAPPIN THEM IN.
T-ALLEN WAIT, WHY ARE YOU DOIN THIS TO ME I SHOULD BE THE ONE MAD THE WAY YA MOM TALKED TO ME.
A- THIS AINT GOT NOTHIN TO DO WIT MY MOM AND IM NOT DOIN s*** YOU ARE. SO THIS WHERE YOU COME WHEN YOU BE GOIN OUT WIT YA LIL FRIENDS WELL YOU KNOW WHAT YOU STAY HERE.
TIAURA- BYE MOM, SHE WAVED AND HE SHUT THE
DOOR.
T- WHERE YOU GOIN WIT MY KIDS?
A- YOU NOT GOIN BE FUCKIN WIT THESE NIGGAS AND HAVE MY KIDS IN DANGER, I DONT KNOW WHEN YA DUMB ASS GOIN REALIZE YOU CANT BE ALL OUT AND ABOUT WIT ALL THESE HATERS OUT HERE CAUSE ONE OF THEM GOIN RUN UP ON YOU AND WHOOP YA ASS JUST CAUSE YOU WIT ME, YOU SEE HOW THEY ARE WHEN YOU BE AT THE GAME, YOU GOTTA SIT UPTOP NOW CAUSE THEY BE FUCKIN WIT YOU BUT YOU KNOW WHAT YOU ON YA OWN.
SHE STARTED CRYIN AND THE TEARS DIDNT FAZE HIM.
A- DONT SIT HERE AND CRY, BEFORE I WALKED IN YOU WAS ALL HYPED UP TO GO OUT SO TAKE YA ASS OUT BUT YOU NOT TAKIN MY SEEDS WIT YOU.
HE GOT IN AND PULLED OFF. TAWANNA WENT BACK IN THE HOUSE AND TOLD DEE WHAT HAPPENED.

ALLEN WENT TO HIS MOM HOUSE AND PUT THE KIDS IN THE TUB AND TO BED, THEN HE TALKED TO HIS MOM AT THE TABLE WHILE EATIN SOME CHEESECAKE.
B- MOM I CANT BELIEVE SHE IS GOIN OUT WIR SOME NIGGA AFTER WHAT HAPPEN I MEAN SHE KEEP THINKIN CANT NOTHIN HAPPEN TO HER.
A- I TOLD YOU SOMETHIN WAS WRONG WIT DAT GIRL SHE AINT RIGHT IN THE HEAD,
HE LAUGHED AND LOOKED AT HIS MOM.
B- MOM YOU SAID YOU WAS GONNA BE NICE.
A- I AM, YOU KNOW ITS THE TRUTH THATS WHY YOU LAUGHED.
B- THIS GOOD MA, HE ATE THE LAST BITE.
A- BABY YOU NEED TO REALLY THINK ABOUT THIS, IS SHE REALLY THE ONE FOR YOU, I MEAN ALL YALL DO IS ARGUE WIT YOU ON THE ROAD ALL THE TIME LORD KNOWS WHAT SHE BE DOIN AND THIS ARGUIN AND RUNNIN AINT GOOD FOR THE BABIES.
B- I KNOW, I LOVE HER ITS JUST SHE DO SOME STUPID s***, THEN SHE ALWAYS JUMPIN DOWN MY BACK EVERYTIME SHE HEAR I WAS MESSIN WIT SOMEBODY I DONT EVEN BE FUCKIN WIT THESE HOES AND SHE STILL BE ACCUSIN ME OF s*** I CANT EVEN COME IN THE DOOR AND TAKE A SHOWER WIT OUT HER SAYIN WHO WAS YOU FUCKIN, WHY YOU LATE IM LIKE IM OUT RUNNIN MY ASS UP AND DOWN THE COURT SO YA ASS CAN HAVE WHATEVER YOU WANT AND ALL YOU THINK ABOUT IS SOMEBODY FUCKIN SOMEBODY.
A- SHES INSECURE CAUSE SHE KNOWS YOUR SEXY AND YOU CAN HAVE ANY GIRL YOU WANT, SHES BEEN WIT YOU SINCE SHE WAS 16 YOU WAS HER FIRST BOYFRIEND SO IF YOU LEAVE HER SHE GOIN BE UP SHITS CREEK CAUSE SHE SIGNED DAT PRENUP SHE AINT GETTIN s*** AND YOU TAKIN THEM KIDS.
B- MOM DAT AINT RIGHT, I DONT WANNA BE WIT NOBODY ELSE BUT IF SHE KEEP PUSHIN ME THEN WHAT SHE EXPECT IM A MAN. EVERY NIGHT GIRLS IS IN MY FACE AND I WALK PAST IT COMIN HOME THEN WHEN I GET THERE I GOTTA PUT UP WIT HER BULLSHIT.
A- LIKE I SAID YOU NEED TO REALLY EVALUATE YA LIFE AND GET IT TOGETHER, SHE KISSED HIS CHEEK, IM GOIN TO BED LOVE YOU BABY.
B- LOVE YOU TOO MA, NIGHT

ALLEN DID WHAT HIS MOM SAID AND SAT DOWN AND THOUGHT ABOUT HOW FUCKED UP THINGS HAVE BEEN FOR HIM AND WHAT HE NEEDED TO DO. HE FINALLY FELL ALSEEP IN THE BED WITH THE KIDS. THE NEXT DAY TAWANNA GOT ALL DRESSED UP TO GO OUT WIT TY BUT SHE COULDNT GET WHAT ALLEN SAID OUT HER MIND. WHEN TY PULLED UP AT D'S HOUSE TAWANNA...................KEEP IT GOIN IM TIRED!
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nieceye_n_iverson
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 2:31 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was so hott!!! keep up the excellent work and i will continue later. thanx 4 adding on.
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Ta'Shanda
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 26, 2002 6:48 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ABG3 that was hott.
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 27, 2002 2:47 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

dats tite
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nieceye_n_iverson
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Location: *North Carolina*

PostPosted: Wed Nov 27, 2002 4:23 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

tawanna and tyree are riding in his lexus.

ty- why u so quiet?
t- oh, nothing i just got alot on my mind.
ty- like what?
t- nothin just me and allen... our life has been crazy these last couple of months.
ty- why?
t- damn you nosy!
ty- naw i just wanna know whats been going on wit my girl.
t- look i am still married so lets just keep this on the friend level okay?
ty- ok whateva.

they get to the restaurant and they are sitting down eating and talking.

t- damn this food good!
ty- i can tell.
t- shut up.
ty- now slow down mule.
t- fucc you nigga! (playing)
ty- no but seriously what has been gooing on in your life FRIEND?
t- i cant talk about it.
ty- pleez girl tell me.
t- no i cant.
ty- pleez.
t- well, some nigga went crazy on me and my family cuz he wanted me.
ty- damn.
t- but some nigga's be trippin. one thing they shouldnt mess wit is my kids cuz they are my heart.
ty- i know, i told jamie that he should take the kids and that he should just think of another way to get at you.
t- what did you just say?
ty- what, i aint say nothing.
t- no you just said jamie kiddnapped my kids.
ty- no i didnt.
t- yea you did. oh my god you were in on this s***!
ty- look tawanna i can explain everything.
t- no!!!

tawanna runs out the restuarant and lookwss around and woders what she is gonna do. then she realizes she has her cell phone so she calls allen at ann's house.

ann- hello?
t- hello ann is allen there?
ann- i dont think he would wanna talk to you.

tyree runs in front of her and trys to talk.

ty- look i aint mean for this s*** to happen like this it just happened ok?
t- no get away from me you crazy bitch!

tytree smacks tawanna and she falls to the ground then he kicks her in her lip and runs to his car and pulls off. by this time tawanna is crying. then she remembers ann in on the phone.

ann- tawanna whats wrong? are you there? are you there tawanna? teedee? tawanna!!!
t- ann im here.
ann- whats the problem? why are you crying?
t- it is some crazy s*** going on and i am standed and i just got beaten! (crying)
ann- hold up let me get chuck.

allen gets the phone.

a- hello?
t- baby thank you 4 coming to the phone-
a- what you want?
t- baby pleez come and get me because i just got beaten and tyree is a pysco and he is down wit jamie and dem boys and he beat me then left me at this restuarant! i am so sorry you were-
a- no i told you. find your own damn way to wherever cuz you should have tried to play me.

he hangs up the phone.
tawanna still crying calls her girl "d". nobody is there so she decides she is gonna walk back to ann's house and make allen forgive her. plus she is missing her kids.
so she is walking 4 about 20 min. then all of a sudden outta no where this black subburban pulls up and grabs tawanna and puts her in the car.
its jamie and boo.

j- hey gurlie, i just heard you and my old friend tyree just had a date. have a good time?
t- fucc you nigga.
j- oh no the only thats getting fucced is you when we get back to my crib. we ganna finish what we started (he says this while running his fingers through he hair).
t- get your hands off of me bitch.
j- oh Boo, she a smart ass aint she.
Boo- yea but we gonna fix her s*** good buddy.
j- oh no doubt!
boo- we gon run da train on dat son?
j- naw this all me baby!
boo- you aint even gonna let me get a little taste?
j- naw nigga this all me!

they get back to jamie's crib. Boo is holding tawanna down and jamie is about doing his thing (ya know what i mean). tawanna is yelling screaming crying and everything else. jamie is still trying to fucc her but he is not succesful. after about 2minutes of jamie TRYING to do her tyree runs in and pulls him away from her. so jamie couldnt really do nothing wit tawanna.

ty- man dont try do dat to her.
j- what the fucc is wrong wit u?

(boo still holding tawanna down)

tyree punches jamie and they start fighting. boo runs and trys to break it up and then tawanna makes a run 4 it. she runs all the way to ann's house and beats on the door.

ann- who the hell is this beating on my damn door?
ann opens the door.

tawanna runs in and she sees allen walking towards the door.

t- allen baby i am sorry! they tried to rape me! tyree hit me and he busted my lip see? allen i am so sorry baby i luv you, you know i do! pleez dont push me away! i was wrong you were right i luv you pleez baby help me i cant go thruogh this by myself...

(tawanna crying hyserically and she falls in allen's arms)

a- its okay baby calm down...

allen is shocked and feeling bad. he couldnt believe how mean he was to tawanna and that she almost got raped, he was feeling guilty and blsming himself for what happened.

*******as always let me know if ya feelin the story**************
********and everybody that keeps adding on... thank you cuz ya stories be having me never wanting to leave my computer. keep up the excellent work************


keep da people guessing wit the story*****
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*Bubba Chick03*
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 27, 2002 5:04 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

aaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwww damn! That was HOOTTTT. OHH my goodnes, that was tight!!
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deuce2
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 27, 2002 6:30 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

wut up all peoples these stories be so hott and all yall is doing yall thang!!!!! It seems so real... yall need to be book writersor play writers cause yall be coming up wit some good stuff!!!!

keep it gangsta and keep it AI forever and always ya babygurl deuce2 holla
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AI_LL
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 27, 2002 7:02 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Yall doing yall damn thang I'm suppose to have my ass under the drier I'm over here crying in the beauty salong people think I'm crazy and my boyfriend breaking up with me on the two way yall are doing so good keep up the good work.
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answer_ai
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 27, 2002 7:03 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

THE STORY IS ON POINT..KEEP IT COMIN....MUCH LUV, ANSWER_AI
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chrisann
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 27, 2002 8:17 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by AI_LL:
Yall doing yall damn thang I'm suppose to have my ass under the drier I'm over here crying in the beauty salong people think I'm crazy and my boyfriend breaking up with me on the two way yall are doing so good keep up the good work.


I tell you.. this site has the craziest members that would be crazy in a good way.

NE Way ya'll keep this story coming cause its OFF DA HOOK
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nieceye_n_iverson
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 27, 2002 7:03 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

im going to continue:
t- what are we gonna do allen?
a- i dont know.
t- (still crying) tyree was in on it and he slipped up and said that he told jamie he shouldnt have taken our kids... my life is turning into hell on earth.
a- baby go lay down you need to rest after what happened.

tawanna goes and lays down. then ann starting telling allen how she feels about the situation.

ann- if that damn girl would listen to somebody the s*** wouldnt have happened.
a- ma, i cant believe you would say something like that after what just happened.
ann- you are whipped allen cuz you sat there and told she cant trust everybody and she still gonna go out wit a nigga she dont even know.
a- that was her man in highschool.
ann- see i thought tyou were her man in highschool? see i told you she aint s***!
a- i was her man then but i wasnt the only boyfriend she had in highschool just like she wasnt my only girl.
ann- well she still dont know him enough to be going out w/him and anywayz she married to you so she shouldnt be going out with another man.
a- ma, i know she do some dumb ass s*** sometimes but that is still my wife and i love her no matter what and no matter what you say thats no gonna change.
ann- well i can see you got your mind made up on who side you gonna take...
a- see, there you go. aint nobody even taking sides ma.
ann- whatever, im tired.

ann goes in her room to go to sleep. allen is still standing by the door when the doorbell rings. he answers the door and it is Derek and Will.

d- what up nigga?
w- yea what up.
a- chillin.
d- me and will just came by to tell you that we found the camera in your crib.
a- aw, for reel? where was it was it just 1.
d- yea them dumb ass niggas only put one. and i knew it couldnt be nothing complicated if the put it up. it wa in your living room.
a- oh thanx yall my niggas! let go sit down aiight?
d&w- aiight.

they go sit down in ann's living room.

w- so whats been up wit you and tawanna.

allen tells them about how tyree hit tawanna and how jamie tried to...

d- thats messed up man!
a- i know. but i feel bad because if only i would have gone and picked her up...

allen starts getting teary eyed.

w- nigga you better not cry and do that bitch s***.

allen laughs.

a- you crazy man, i aint gonna cry i just feel bad that i did that to her.

derek looks at will.

d- dont sweat it. we gonna take care of everything. we been niggas since middle school and we gonna protect our niggas family.
w- yea.
a- aiight, but what yall mean.
w- dont worry about it cuz we got it.
a- aiight but dont do no crazy s*** now.
d&w- we not.

derek and will leave.

allen goes upstairs to where tawanna is sleep.

a- tawanna you sleep baby?
t- no.
a- oh.
t- what you want?
a- i just wanted to tell you... i gotta say...
t- what are you trying to say allen?
a- i wanna say im sorry i didnt come pick you up and im sorry for all the harsh s*** i said to you. i know you gonna fucc up and make some mistake just like i do.
t- and im sorry for going out with tyree. i shouldnt have wronged you like that and i regret it.
a- now that all our apologize are done... gimme some love girl.

you know what happens next... and they dont worry cuz the kids are sleep.

meanwhile when derek and will leave ann's house they go looking for jamie, boo, and tyree. they go to the abandoned building where they had tawanna and all the nigga's are there. they have on ski masks and they have guns so they just walk in and start shooting up the place. after they leave they go back to there house.

d- allen aint gotta worry about them no more.
w- all of them dead?
d- i think so. if they not they close to it.
w- yea.
d- you thinkk we gonna get caught?
w- not if we go about this the rught way.
d- this some scary s*** though.
w- yea but we had to do it. all the s*** allen done 4 us. he took us out the hood and bout this house and he always had our back so we gotta have his.
d- yea. you right.
w- and that was a dope idea to borrow john car cuz just in case anybody saw us, the heat wont be on us.
d- its at night and plus nobody aint ever around that way so nobody probally aint see us. and yea that was a good idea cuz i dont like that nigga john anyway.

derek and will get rid of all the evidence. they bury the guns and burn the ski masks and the clothes they had on just in case anyone saw them.

the next morning allen gets out of the shower and ann calls him.

a- ma, im coming.
ann- look.

the news is on and they are talking about 2 men dead and another in the hospital in critical condittion. they said it took place in the abandoned building where the men took tawanna. then they said the bodies where identified as jamie turner and mike "boo" smith. the person in critical condittion was tyree moore. then they say there are no suspects at this time.

a- oh s***!

allen runs and calls will and derek.

***** well if youre feeling the story let me know*********
**********pleez add on**********


keep it gangsta and keep it ai
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ms_ksw
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 27, 2002 9:14 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Girl, you are on the money with this story! I read this story all day at work so I can keep my eyes open...lol...Continue to do the damn thing!

Much love girl!!!!
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deuce2
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 28, 2002 12:40 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

these stories be real good i cant believe how talented yall really are i bet ppl on other sites is tryna kopy yall style cause yall is hott!!! keep up all that good work
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azia_brown
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 28, 2002 12:41 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

they already copying. one site got a story like this site has except they usin Eve
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deuce2
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 28, 2002 2:39 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

thas messed up ppl stealin this hot ai style they wanna be like us so badd!!!
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nieceye_n_iverson
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 28, 2002 8:03 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

because there has been a little confusion on why jamie,boo,and tyree were at the abandoned building is because that is their chill spot (the place they get high at, drink...ya know).

keep it gangsta
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deuce2
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 28, 2002 8:04 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

i wasnot confused i was just sayin
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 28, 2002 7:53 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ok i am gonna type a little:

allen calls derek and will.

d- holla.
a- you know what i just saw on the news?
d- what?
a- that them niggas got killed, and i think you and will had something to do with it.
d- look we did what we had to do but dont worry. you aint it this no more this was all us. if we go down we going down alone.
a- that aint even what im worried about. that dude tyree aint dead and if he survive he might know a little more than he should.
d- well if he do, we just go finish him off.
a- NO. you cant just go killing people like that man. i wish you wouldnt have done that 2 them.
d- look well there aint much we can do about that now is it. if we had'nt done it them niggas could have came and fucced up ya whole family now you and gotta worry about that no more.
a- aiight man but this junk better not come back to me.
d- it wont.

well allen, tawanna, tiaura, and deuce come go back home and try to start living life normal again. like 2 1/2 months later tyree makes a full recovery and tawanna and allen and their kids start living there ordinary life again. no suspects still on who killed jamie and boo.

Allen and tawanna go to the Patti Labelle concert like he promised her.


*******someone please continue. someone pleez continue*****************

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PostPosted: Thu Nov 28, 2002 7:56 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

oh yea i forgot to say... if you dont like the story keep it to your damn self!and to all who like it. thanx for reading and thanx 4 the support.


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PostPosted: Thu Nov 28, 2002 7:59 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I think I see where u going with this... I'm gettin curiouser and curiouser
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 29, 2002 3:57 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

i am gonna continue a.s.a.p but somebody pleez continue! Well i gotta bounce so peace!

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PostPosted: Sat Nov 30, 2002 3:10 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ok here goes:

after the concert is over it is about 9:00. tawanna wants to stop to the grocery store to pick up a few things for the house. they get in there and they see tyree and he comes over.

ty- hey ummmm... can i ask you a few questions? (talking to allen)
a- what?
ty- i know all the things that me and my boys did to your family was wrong but really i was'nt in that deep with them and i am sorry 4 whateva we caused; but i just wanna know do you know who came and shot up our spot like that?
a- no.
ty- well i got a idea who did it but next time you see them tell them to watch there back.

Tyree walks away and ai talks to tawanna.

a- he got some nerve.
t- well his boys are dead...
a- and i aint have s*** to do wit that.
t- well we need to get to ya mamma's house and pick up the kids.

They go to ann's house.

a- hey ma.
ann- hey son.
a- were my kids good.
ann- they never are, but hey tawanna.
t- hey.
a- why is everybody always trying top play my kids.
ann- allen if they bad they bad.
t- they are kinda bad allen.
a- i know but everybody aint gotta tell us that.
ann- well you should already know.
a- well anywayz where are my kids at.
ann- dont get smart they sitting in my living room watching t.v.

they go get tiaura and deuce, and they go back home to find the following note:

ai, nigga i know your boys was they ones that came and shut up me and my boys place and you better tell them that they better get outta town and fast because if i get to them they gonna pay 4 what they done. Tyree

********Thanx 4 reading** Let me know if you like the story if you dont please keep it to yourselves*******but feeling the the story holla back****** and feel free to add on*****
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 30, 2002 4:19 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

NOW THAT WAS REAL GOOD PEOPLE REAL GOOD
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 30, 2002 9:57 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

somebody's gonna get HURRRT!!!
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 30, 2002 10:04 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Thanx 4 the support everybody, i will continue with the story:

tawanna picks up the note and reads it.

t- allen i think you need to see this.

allen reads the note.

a- why does this bitch ass nigga leave notes. he gonna mess around and make me mad. i am sick of this s*** with these jealous niggas.
t- what are u gonna do allen. you need to tell derek and will to move back to V.A because things are way to heated 4 them to be staying here having problem with them philly boys.
a- you right. i am gonna call them as soon as we get in the house.

allen calls derek and will.

d- what up.
a- derek?
d- yea who dis?
a- this allen.
d- oh what up yo?
a- chillin but we really gotta talk about something serious man.
d- yea what.
a- well that crazy nigga tyree left a note at my door sayin my boys better get outta town or there will be problems.
d- yea. and.
a- and yall should move back to V.A a.s.a.p.
d- what? me and Will aint running back to V.A just because some nigga's got it in 4 us. No i aint going out like not punk yo 4 real.
a- naw you better do that cuz things are way to crazy here for yall to be staying here.
d- i still dont know.
a- you need 2 know. if you mmove back to V.A i will buy you and Will a new house and cars just get the fucc outta Philly man cuz if that nigga tyree come and kill yall ima be blaming myself ya know.
d- i hear what u sayin but i gotaa talk it over with Will.

Will was in the bathroom and he walks out as soon as derk and ai get off the phone.

d- allen said that dude tyree got it in 4 us and he think we should move back to V.A.
w- he want us to be some bitches and run scared?
d- naw i dont even think it is like that. I think he just looking out 4 us.
w- i think we should move just in case the try and get us as suspects.
d- moving cant protect us from charges but they cn protect us form that dude tyree.
w- i do kinda miss my mamma.
d- me too.
w- i think we should move back.
d- i dont really wanna move but if you want to i am going wit you.
w- aiight then its settled then.

derek calls ai.

a- holla.
d- aye, allen this is d.
a- oh what up, yall deecide?
d- yea me and will think we need to move.
a- thats good when yall wanna leave?
d- A.S.A.P. a week or less.
a- ok then we gonna do that then.
d- aiight. but aye allen.
a- what?
d- thanx 4 always having me and will back. you always find a way to come through and ima miss u dawg.
a- yea, same here.

derek and will pack there stuff and move back to V.A in a week.then a day after the move ai is sitting in his lliving room thinking about how much he misses his boys and wondering who he is gonna chill with. Then the door bell rings.

its ann.

a- hey ma.
ann- hey son. why you look so sad.
a- nothin im just missing my niggas.
ann- baby you gonna pull through.
a- i know.
ann- well i brung your favorite: fried shrimp.
a- thanx mammma.
ann- anytime baby. where is tawanna and them bad ass kids.
a- (laughing) they all upstairs watching tv.
ann- oh.well u gonna eat.
a- yea.

a couple of days later allen has a game. on his way to the game his cell phone rings.
its derek's mother.

a- hello?
dm- hey allen i am at the hosptial and i just called to tell you that derek got shot a couple of hours ago.
a- WHAT!!!??? is he aiight.
dm- the doctors dont know. they sed he got shot in the stomach.
a- oh s***....
dm- dont worry though just pray 4 him.

allen played his game and was so nervous that he only scored 15 pts. After the game he went home told tawanna what happened to derek and then drove all the way to V.A at 9:30pm.

********more lata**********
*******keep it gangsta********
****feel free 2 add on******
****holla back if you feelin the story******
****shut up if you not********
naw but keep negative remarks 2 yourself cuz i dont need em'.
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 30, 2002 11:50 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

more lata
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 01, 2002 12:34 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Damn nieceye I just read the rest of the story and the suspence is killing me.


~*~MizD~*~
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 01, 2002 4:09 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

aiight here goes:

allen drives to the hospital in V.A where derek is. He goes up to the front desk to get checked in and him and the lady at the front desk have the following convo:

a- Derek Mitchell.
lafd- are you a family member.
a- ummmm. n-, yea.
lafd- relation to the patient?
a- i'm his ummm cousin.
lafd- im sorry we cant let you in sir because you would have to be his brother. oh yea you cant go in anywayz because visiting hours are over.
a- look lady i am not going to ask your ass again. give me the damn pass or i will will walk in my damn self.
lafd- and if you do that i will call the police.
a- well can you at least tell me what room he is in.
lafd- no.
a- stupid bitch!
lafd- i beg your pardon!

allen walks away and sits on the bench nervous scared and angry at the same time thinking about derek. The he sees a doctor and gets the room # (and floor) from him and then while the lady at the front desk is on the phone he sneaks up to dereks room. he walks in.

dereks mother- how did you get here?
a- i drove.
dm- that was so sweet. you drove some hours didnt you.
a- yea. how is he.
dm- the doctor came and told me about an hour ago that he is gonna make it.
a- who shot him.
dm- i dont know.
a- well i better not find out.
dm- allen there is no need for that now you need to just be strong and pray for him not go and cut the fool because of some crazy nigga on the streets.
a- i know youre right but...
dm- this is not a time to be angry.
a- is will here?
dm- oh yea he went down stirs he said he just needed sometime to be alone.
a- oh.

will walks in.

a- whats up man?
w- oh when you get here allen?
a- couple of minutes ago.
w- you drove?
a- yea.
w- didnt you have a game today?
a- yea i came as soon as it was over.
w- oh.
a- who shot him.
w- oh you wondering if tyree had anything to do with it huh?
a- yea.
w- well he didnt.
a- who then.
w- the bullet wasnt aimed for him. we was in the projects on the corner just chillin talking to juan and all them boys, and some dudes had some beef with them so they started shooting. i started running and before derek knew what was going on he got shot.
a- damn thats fucced up.
w- yea.
a- is he on a coma(spelling) or what?
w- naw he sleeping.
a- he not on life support is he.
w- naw.
a- thats good.
w- yea.
a- is he gonna be paralyzed or anything?
w- naw the doc aint mention it.
a- aiight.
w- how long you staying.
a- i dont know. may leave tommorrow. i dont like leaving tawanna and the kids by themselves wit that nigga tyree on the loose.
w- yea i feel you on that.

derek wakes up and is barely able to talk but he can a little.

d- who dat?
a- you know who this is nigga.
d- (coughing) oh allen.
a- yea but dont trty to talk man you in bad enough condition.
d- i'll...live.

allen stays the night in the hospital with dereks mother, will, and derek.


********well feel free 2 add on. let me know if you like the story. and thanx 4 da support.****************************
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 01, 2002 8:01 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

This story is comin along really wel, madd props to whoever helped write the last two pages. I told my self that I had to finish reading them so I sat at my computer and read them but I wasn't payin attention to the names so that's why I jus said madd props to everybody who wrote. This story is gettin too good and I think that I'll post somethin in a little while if I can think of somethin kinda good to go along wit what ya'll got down already!?!
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PostPosted: Mon Dec 02, 2002 4:01 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

somebody add on plz!!
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PostPosted: Mon Dec 02, 2002 3:26 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

despite all the bull s*** this is a very good story and i know some of you will think i am trying to be funny but for real this story is real good please keep it going
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 03, 2002 2:47 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

here goes:

the lady from the front desk walks up in derek's room.

lafd-hey i told you, you couldnt come up last night. how did you get up here?
a- i walked my ass up here thats how i got up here.
lafd- well if this happens again i will have to call the police.
a- yea yea whatever.
lafd- oh yes, mam the doctor asked me to tell you that he is positive that your son will live and that he is doing real well. dereks doctor had to go home because there was an emergency at home but we will have another one for him. okay?
dm- okay.
lafd leaves.
a- i hate that bitch. she get on my nerves.
dm- now boy you need 2 quit.
a- (looking at his watch) i am bout to go back to philly.
dm- so soon?
a- yea i got practice today at 5:00. It is 9:00 now and i dont even know if i am gonna make it back in time.
dm- well alright have a safe trip.
w- aiight son.
a- later.
dm- tell ya momma 2 call me.
a- aiight.

allen leaves and drives home and gets there at 3. when he get home:

deuce- hey daddy.
a- hey son.
t- how is he?
a- he is doing good. the doctor sed he gonna live.
t- thats good. oh yea couch brown called and wanted to let u know practice at 5.
a- i know but i dont think ima go cuz i am tired.
t- i understand that but u really need to stop missing all these practices before they trade your ass.
a- see look here you go again. get off mty dick s*** as soon as i get i home from that long ass drive i gotta hear this s***.
t- (looking hurt) damn allen i wasnt trying to make you mad i was just saying. (walkiing away)

allen thinking

damn i need to stop being so damn mean!

then 5:00 rolls around and he is sitting around the house chillin. then 5:30 then 6:00 the 7:00 then 8. then finally 9.
then the phone rings and it is a unhappy couch brown.

a- hello
cb- allen why did you miss another practice?
a- oh, ,i had to drive to V.A today because my boy got shot and i had to see about him and i didint get back till alittle while ago and i was tired.
cb- look allen i know you have to be loyal but you cant drop everything and see about your friends. they are grgown and they should be able to take care of themselves.
a- look i dont wanna get into my personal life with you because i am really stressed and i cant do this right now.
cb- allen i am serious you gotta quit missing these practices because you have a commitment here so be loyal to that.
a- well aiight bye.
cb- bye.

they hang up the phone.

*****thats it you guys can add on if you want**** dont 4get to holla at cha gyrll if you like the story.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 03, 2002 3:16 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Yea that was real good so keep up tha good work!
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 03, 2002 3:32 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I always catch myself ready to do somethin but then I read the last part of the story anddecide that I'm not gonna do nothin cause if I do then I think that I'll mess it up or somethin.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 03, 2002 3:37 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

naw gyrl don't be scared do yo thang ma.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 03, 2002 3:52 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

My first time so here goes:
Allen thinkin: Damn here we go again.Tawanna comes down stairs.
T: Baby who was that?
A: Nobody..
T: Nobody huh
A: Just Coach Brown gettin on my ass about practice.
T: Damn Chuck, I told you missin all that practice was gon lead to trouble.
A: yea you right
T: Well what did he say?
A: He was just sayin how I need to be loyal to him and my team, over my boys(Tawanna cuts him off)
T: Boy now you kno dat ain't true,he wouldn't tell you to choose between yo boys over your career.
A: well dats what it sounds like! Damn I don't even wanna talk about this s*** no mo. Lets just chill for a minute. So they watch t.v.
T: yea ok, whateva
Hope ya liked it peace~
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 03, 2002 2:22 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

That was so hot girl! but i hope u continue later and thanx 4 adding on. and AI3girl3 go head and add on and dont be afraid about messing anything up because i know you probally got mad skillz!
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 04, 2002 12:37 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

tHaNx!
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 04, 2002 12:39 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Sorry I spelled your mane wrong AI3girl3.
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 04, 2002 6:55 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

i waiting for you all to add on and you all did and it is still a good story and more people need to add on and i hope who ever does keep with the story line nieceye n iverson started with cause that would make it more interesting and those who come in later wont get confused you all have good imaginations i know that i talk a lot of s*** but i keep it real and give props when props are do thank you
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 05, 2002 1:41 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ok i am adding on:

tawanna and allen are sitting down watching t.v. then the phone rings and it is tawanna's friend sheka.

t- hello?
s- hey girl.
t- hey!
s- damn why you getting so happy?
t- cuz i aint talked 2 you in a long time!
s- oh yea, well... HEY!
t- shut up. (playing)
s- naw i quit but you wanna go out tonite?
t- ummm i dont know...what time is it?
s- its already 9:30.
t- dang.
s- so are you gonna go or not i need 2 know.
t- well yea. where we going?
s- where else give we gonna hit the club! and oh yea me and christy got something to tell you.
t- what?
s- tell you when we see you aiight?
t- aiight gurlie.
s- be there at 10:00 gonna be ready by then?
t- yea lata.
s- lata.

they get off the phone and at 10:20 sheka and christy go and pick up tawanna. they are riding in the car:

t- damn yall late!
s- you know we on nigga time.
t- oh true dat true dat. what yall need to tell me?
c- oh... well i am pregnant!
t- 4reel?
c- yea.
t- how far along are you?
c- 5 weeks.
t- damn when you find out?
c- like last week.
t- oh i am gonna be an auntie!
c- yea cuz yall are my sisters.
t- i cant wait. are you nervous?
c- hell yea this is my first child.
t- well i got 2 kids so you know ima help you so dont be nervous.

the arrive at the club. they are standing at the bar drinking a little but not much being so they have to drive home. ok... now a broke lokking dude that is drunk comes up to tawanna. his name is ron.

r- hey sweet thang buy me a drink.
t- oh, you cant be talking to me.
r- yea let me hold $5.
t- get away from me ya broke ass nigga!


well somebody can add on....
thanx 4 reading and the support.
I AM OUT AND IMA KEEP SHAKIN OFF DEM HATERS.
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 05, 2002 3:00 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I want to continue:
* * * * * * *

Ron amn calm down...Why are you acting like that baby?
Tawanna:First of all I'm not your baby so don't even try that and I'm not giving you a damn thing.Is that clear?
Ron:Crystal clear....now see,thats the stuff that I cant understand about you females
now-a-days.
Tawanna:what the hell are you talking about?
Ron:Ya'll always complain about guys being bums and s*** and ya'll claim that we neglect ya'll but yet every time a nigga tries to holla ya'll try to diss us and automatically jump on that whole independant s***.
Tawanna:well I wasn't wrong because you are a BUM....and I didn't mention anything about being independant.....I already have a man that attends to my every need so don't even go there and speak for self...don't bother saying we,just say you because you look like the brokest dude up in the spot....and you didn't try to speak to me,When you approached me the first thing that you asked for was some damn money and incase you haven't noticed...we don't know eachother....
(he cuts her off)
Ron:Oh believe me..I know you.
Tawanna:no you don't.
Ron idn't your momma ever tell you not to assume?
Tawanna:Its non of your business what my momma has told me and what she has not.....and if you know me then who am I?
Ron:Your Allen Iverson's wife right?
Tawanna Speaks cautiously)Maybe I am....but then again maybe I'm not.
Ron:Look don't play game with me girl..... all that people are talking about up in here..is you...the "answer's" wifey and your little clique.
Tawanna:You actually listen to that mess?So because you think that I'm his wife...you can to come over and ask me for some change?
Ron:huh..yeah,I mean basically.......look lets skip the bullshit...do you have five dollars or not because I really have other females to attend to.
Tawanna.......

~*~MizD~*~

[ December 04, 2002: Message edited by: *MizDiamonds* ]
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 05, 2002 3:39 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

That was tight I, y'all holdin it down! I wonder what Tawanna is going to say next.Peace-It's Murda
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 05, 2002 5:10 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was so hott keep up the good work gurlie!
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 05, 2002 6:04 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Thankyou
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 05, 2002 6:39 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

dYeah dat was HOTT!~ It was so hott I had to put to t's on HOTT~!
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 05, 2002 9:44 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

yeah that was good. please continue!!!!!!!!
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 05, 2002 11:39 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I'm bored all hell so I'ma add on a lil sumthing.

T- Go tend to them then
R-Bye,you just another broke bitch with money.
T-I'll act like I didn't hear that.
( He walks off)
T-He done messed up my mood are yall ready to go?
S-If you are
C-I'm ready
(So they leave they drop T off and she goes in the house and puts on her PJs and goes to sleep.~~~Next Morning)
A- Have fun last night?
T- Yea, until this broke down nigga came in face askin for money
A- Askin for money?
T-Yea, go step to my face and be like let me hold $5. I was like you aint gettin s*** from me.
A- crazy ass people these days
T- I know right, You going anywhere today?
A-Yea to practice
T- What!?! It's going to snow, Allen is going to practice
A-You tryin to be funny, thats aight for you.I'm not coming home after practice.
T-Why not?
A-I got things to see and people to do
T- Huh(looking like she bout to slap the s*** outta him)
A-I meant I got things to do and people to see.(smiling)
t-Don't smile. Who you gotta see?
A-( starts rappin that Ludacris song) Stay out my business, my business. Stay the f*** up out my business, cuz it's mine all mine.
T- Well,( tryin to rap) You my husband, my husband,and since you my husband whateva business you got is mine too, mine all mine.
A-Don't eva try to get in the rap industry, cuz you will drop and flop in just 1 week.
T-Just like you
A-(angry) Shut up, and I didn't drop
T-Yea, tell me anything
A-I'm about to tell you to suck these nuts
T-And I'm telling yo to kiss my ass
A- Get one first
T-(offended) You got a problem with my butt
A- What butt? All I see is back. Baby got back. ( he starts laughing)
T- Why you laughin?
A-Cuz it was funny, you aint got no butt you just got back.
T-Ha,Ha maybe you should have been a comedian besides a basketball player
A-Maybe,make it big in either one of them couldn't I?
T- Anywayz, when you leaving?
A-When I feel like it
T-Why you getting smart?
A-I'm not its just 9:30 and practice dont begin till 11 and you askin when I'm leaving. Sounds like you tryin to get rid of me.
T-I am
A-For what
T- Cuz my man is coming over
A-Who?
T- Your best friend
(Allen starting to take this a little serioulsy cuz one of his friend always be talkin bout her)
A-All jokes aside, why you tryin to rush me
T-I just told you so I can be with your best friend
A-Who
T- I'm not that stupid,Allen. I'm not going to tell you his name so you can just go over there and start some s***
A- I always thought in the back of my mind that you was messin with one of my boys
T- Allen, I know you don't think I'm serious
I'm just playing
A- People don't play like that. You were tellin the truth.
T- No I wasn't.
A-Who is it?
T- Nobody.
A- I guess you got tired of me cheatin on you so you goin to go around and cheat on me huh?
T- Allen it was a JOKE.
A-Look I'm leaving, go to practice alittle early. But I will find out who it is.
T-Why you trippin? You takin this s*** seriously?
A- Whateva, I'll see ya later.
( he leaves)
T- I can't belive that nigga took that s*** seriously. I guess I can't joke with him.

If you dont like you can just ignore this.
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 06, 2002 12:24 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I started writin the other day but it got messed up, so let me start a new one.

(Allen is at practice with his boys and jus talkin and laughin with them, meanwhile T is at home gettin ready to go shoppin with her friend Shay)

s-girl i'm broke
t-then why you tryin to go shoppin with me
s-i know you can get a sista an outfit
t-i could but...
s-girl you know we cool
t-yeah i know but that don't mean nothin
s-it means you don't have to be so cheap
t-whatever
(About $2000 later they leave the mall and Allen is tryin to get some food on his charge but his card ain't goin through)

a-it must be somethin wrong with that machine
cashier-no it's perfectly fine sir
a-run it back through right quick
c-whatever
a-aiight forget it

(T comes home after Allen and she's comin through the door with her arms full of stuff)

a-where did you get that
t-uhhh the mall
a-i mean the money for that nigga
t-our card
a-the platinum or gold one t?
t-platinum why?
a-that's mine and i couldn't get no lunch cause you spent up all my extra money
t-nigga don't trip i got you
a-you broke too how you got me?
t-you got mills boy how you broke now?
a-i never said i was broke i'm jus mad
t-i'm about sick of yo attitude
a-mmmmmhhhhh whatever
t-see that's what i'm talkin about
a-first you cheatin on me then you spendin all my extra money on some clothes that you probably already got in yo closet, why don't you buy somethin that i want you to have like thongs or somethin
t-allen come on now, me in a thing
a-that is true but somethin for me then
t-allen i don't feel like arguin i'll be upstairs if you feel like dealin with me and my new victorias secret set...
a-okay whatever t

Tell me what ya'll thought...
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 06, 2002 4:22 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

PRETTY PUERTORICAN THAT WAS MADD.... FUNNY ESPECIALLY ABOUT THE PART ABOUT THEM RAPPIN I'M STILL LAUGHING RIGHT THIS MOMENT....
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 06, 2002 4:46 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ai3girl and pretty puertorican that was excellent. thanx 4 adding on and you all doing a great job so keep up the good work!
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 06, 2002 4:48 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

oh yea i will add on a.s.a.p but i would like 4 yall 2 keep adding on and i will add on as soon as i think of something.

whateva you do, keep it gangsta
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 06, 2002 7:07 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Thanx Yall for the props. I feel special now.
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 06, 2002 7:08 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

special ed.....it was a joke pretty. i had to say that cuz i was told i was special ed this mornin.
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 07, 2002 1:51 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ok yall know what they did after that...

in the morning all the iversons wake up at 11:00 and are eating breakfast.

t- guess what allen?
a- what?
t- christy is pregnant.
a- your friend christy?
t- yea.
a- damn my 3rd kid.
t- what?
a- yea i be hittin that all the time.
t- ALLEN!
a- naw girl i'm jut playing but fo real who is her baby daddy?
t- none of your damn buisness since you wanna play like you fathering other women's children.
deuce- stop arguing mommy and daddy!
t- we're not arguing were just talking.
a- stop taking s*** so seriously i was just playing wit you girl.
t- thats what i told you when you got hyped about me saying i was messing wit your boy.
a- see...thats different...
t- shut up allen cuz you bout to make up something crazy.
a- naw really that is different.
t- whateva i dont wanna talk about it anymore.
a- ok, then 4 get.
t- okay.

(the door bell rings)

t- i'll get it.
a- yea you do that.
t- shut up nigga.

tawanna get the door then 5 minutes later...

t- ALLEN COME HERE!
a- (running, then gets there) what.

he looks and sees keshia and she a pudge in here stomach.

t- she's pregnant and she says the baby's yours.


well yall i am outie. hope ya fellin the story so peace. ~1~


whateva you do keep it gangsta
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 07, 2002 1:55 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

okay ima try

allen goes in the kitchen to make him some syrup sandwiches.
a: (gets his bread&syrup and sits it on a plate)damn this bread hard. (thinkin to himself) did she just say new victoria secret? i think she did so let me get this and be on my way up there.( he grabs the bottle of syrup)
tawanna hears him comin upstairs, so she jumps in the bed and plays sleep.
allen:uh uh. hell naww. (cuttin on all the lights in the room) it's time to get ya ass up and show me the secret!
t: man ain't no secret, i'm sleep, now cut off the lights.
(allen pulls off all the covers)
a: the least you could've done was wear a matchin' pair. why you got on red and purple.
t: shut up. you ain't wearin nothin "sexy" so stop complainin! why don't you start wearin somethin for me? and what are you doin with syrup?
a: oh damn, you messin up the vibe with all that talk.
t: what chu tryna say?
a: are we gone f*** or what, cuz i got other things i can do.
t: man whateva. come on.
so after they into it and all, deuce was standin behind the door with his new toy- a tape recorder! he recordin all of this.
after all this was ova and deuce was finished recordin, aaron calls( aaron mckie)to joke with allen about practice
a:hello
am: nigga, what chu been doin today?
a: nothin
am: nothin?
a: yeah why?
am: cuz you missed practice
a: naw man, practice is Saturday
am:today is saturday
a: damn! not anotha one, i...
aaron: look i gotta go
a: aight. after he hangs up the phone he wakes tawanna up. see what you made me do! you made me miss practice you appleheaded...
t:appleheaded what? i ain't make you miss
prak-tis
a: you gone get enough of tryna crack jokes. you know i can go all day and even longer about yo 5head... in the middle of their arguement deuce walks in with his taperecorder and starts playin it.

[ December 06, 2002: Message edited by: allen_iverson's_mistress ]
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 07, 2002 1:57 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

oh my badd. just ignore dat
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 07, 2002 2:09 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

HEY WHERE DID YA'LL GET THAT PICTURE WITH MIKE FREEMAN...... I THINK THAT'S HIM AND DEUCE... AND THE OTHER ONE WITH DEUCE AND BOW WOW..... WHERE DID YA'LL GET THOSE SOMEONE PLEASE TELL ME CUZ YA'LL HAVE PHOTOS IN YA SIGNATURE THING THAT I NEVA EVA SEEN B4 SO COULD YA'LL PLEASE REPLY AND TELL ME WHERE YA GOT THEM FROM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 07, 2002 3:24 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

allen_iverson's_mistress i will add on to the story you wrote and work the end of mine in it okay? well here goes:

so deuce's tape is sitting there justa playing and he is sitting there grinning from ear to ear. Allen and Tawanna look at each other in panic while recognizing their voices wanting to kill their crazy little boy.

de- (laughing) daddy, what were you and mommy doing?
a- deuce gimme that tape.
d- huh?
a- gimme that tape now.
d- but daddy why cant i keep it? it aint nothing.
a- give it here!

deuce runs in his room and hides the tape. Allen and Tawanna get there a little late for them to see where he hid it.

t- deuce now be a good boy and tell mommy where the tape is.
d- uhnt uh.
t- boy gimme that damn tape!
a- tawanna calm down we'll get the tape back.
d- no you wont.
a- then i guess you wont becoming out your room till i got that tape in my hands.
d- okay, whatever.

tawanna and allen walk out and close deuces door behind them.

t- what are we gonna do.
a- dont worry, his little ass wil break. I was gonna take out the strap but i domnt even wanna go there with him today.
t- well i will!
a- naw girl we just gotta play it cool cuz he gonna get sick of watching the walls in his room.
t- well if this dont work i am gonna be all over ya ass nigga.
a- thats what got us in this mess in the first place. you tempting my with your big ass 5head.
t- first of all, my 4head is not all that big...
a- s***......
t- shut up, second of all wasnt nobody tempting ya bony ass to do s***.
a- man whatever.
t- yea thats exactly what i thought.
a- and n-e wayz i dont even know why you tripping cuz how will anybody know that it was me and you in that tape?
t- you must have amnesia (spelling?) because whose name was i screaming the whole time?
a- well ya gotta a point there.
t- ummmm hmmmmm...
a- well i still say we wait 4 him to break.
yea and we dont feed him nothing but a stick of celery and a piece of Captain Crunch a day.
t- we cant do that to him, starve that little boy.
a- s***, i can.
t- i know you can but you aint doing that to my baby.
a- ok, ok, lets just wait 4 him to break.
t- what is it with you and this breaking s*** allen?
a- whateva lets just do it.
t- okay whatever you say.

well 2 days have passed and deuce still hasnt "broke". allen and tawanna are stressed thinking of how they can get the tape back. Then on the 2nd day ann comes over to fix all of them dinner. They are all sitting down eating dinner (tiaura 2) deuce is up at his room eating his celery stick (hehehehehe ) naw i am playing, but he is in his room. so they are sitting down eating dinner.

ann- so where is my little bad ass grand son at?
a- he is on punishment.
ann- what did he do this time?
t- oh the usual back talking.
ann- oh. well how is the food.
t&a- good!

deuce sneaks out his room and he goes into the living room and puts the tape with tawanna and allen up there in the stero and starts blasting it so that everyone can hear it. tawanna and allen run and grab the tape.

ann- what was that.
t- ummmmm, nothing.
d- mommy and dady getting down!
a- boy!
allen takes deuce up to his room and then the door bell rings. it is kesha (the hoe).

t- allen come here!
a- (he comes 2 see whats up) what?
t- the ho you messed with says that she is 3 months pregnant by you.


well what do you think? if you like it holla back. let me know how im doing and thanx everybody 4 adding on and thanx 4 the support!


whateva you do keep it gangsta, dont 4 get to holla at cha girl!
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 07, 2002 3:34 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Yo Niecey that was hot and that part about Duece blasting the tape in the livingroom is funny as hell..........So who's gonna continue?


~*~MizD~*~
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 07, 2002 4:17 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Yall doing good this was funny as hell I can't stop laughing.
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 07, 2002 7:16 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

OMG that was funny as hell!!! I haven't laughed this hard all day. Damn.
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 07, 2002 7:21 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Hold up, hold up, hold up....AIM, who is the honey in the picture with Deuce and the little boy? And is that Ra (the one on the left) in the picture with AI and one of his groomsmen? I like the picture with AI looking all fine in his tux. He was all teary-eyed...AWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by allen_iverson's_mistress:
okay ima try

allen goes in the kitchen to make him some syrup sandwiches.
a: (gets his bread&syrup and sits it on a plate)damn this bread hard. (thinkin to himself) did she just say new victoria secret? i think she did so let me get this and be on my way up there.( he grabs the bottle of syrup)
tawanna hears him comin upstairs, so she jumps in the bed and plays sleep.
allen:uh uh. hell naww. (cuttin on all the lights in the room) it's time to get ya ass up and show me the secret!
t: man ain't no secret, i'm sleep, now cut off the lights.
(allen pulls off all the covers)
a: the least you could've done was wear a matchin' pair. why you got on red and purple.
t: shut up. you ain't wearin nothin "sexy" so stop complainin! why don't you start wearin somethin for me? and what are you doin with syrup?
a: oh damn, you messin up the vibe with all that talk.
t: what chu tryna say?
a: are we gone f*** or what, cuz i got other things i can do.
t: man whateva. come on.
so after they into it and all, deuce was standin behind the door with his new toy- a tape recorder! he recordin all of this.
after all this was ova and deuce was finished recordin, aaron calls( aaron mckie)to joke with allen about practice
a:hello
am: nigga, what chu been doin today?
a: nothin
am: nothin?
a: yeah why?
am: cuz you missed practice
a: naw man, practice is Saturday
am:today is saturday
a: damn! not anotha one, i...
aaron: look i gotta go
a: aight. after he hangs up the phone he wakes tawanna up. see what you made me do! you made me miss practice you appleheaded...
t:appleheaded what? i ain't make you miss
prak-tis
a: you gone get enough of tryna crack jokes. you know i can go all day and even longer about yo 5head... in the middle of their arguement deuce walks in with his taperecorder and starts playin it.

[ December 06, 2002: Message edited by: allen_iverson's_mistress ]

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PostPosted: Sat Dec 07, 2002 9:15 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

thats was 2 cute..especially when deuce is say that his mommy and daddy gettin "DOWN" that was so cute...immma continue lata im juss tryin 2 brainstorm...HOLLA BACC3
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 07, 2002 9:46 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

the man with deuce and the other lil boy is allen's stepfather(i think)shoot his mama don't play around

and this is ra

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PostPosted: Sun Dec 08, 2002 2:20 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

a-she said what?
k-I said that I'm 3 months pregnant and it's yours.
t-damn Allen who else is u fucking? I guess 3 truly is ur favorite number cause u fucking 3 people :Me,Tesha,and now Kiesha(that rhymes lol )And she's 3 months pregnant.
(Ann hears what's going on and takes the little people upstairs)
a- I don't know this girl I'm telling you.
t-whatever,come in.
k-me?
t-yes you, come in, we gonna talk about this one.
a-man look she lying I never seen her in my life. and besides that u know the only one I'm trying to have kids by is u.
t-shut the f*** up Allen ,u always trying to game ya way outta something, let her tell me what's going on . So Kiesha when and where did u meet Allen?
k-In Houston, they played the Rockets. It was at a club called Static.
(Allen is standing there outraged, looking like he can't believe what she is telling his wife)
a-baby
t-let her finish. Go ahead, how did y'all start talking?
k-I was with my friend and we decided to go into the VIP. There was a rumor going around that Steve Francis was there and since my friend has a crush on him we decided to go check it out. So we got up there and we were chilling or whatever. My friend went off talking to somebody and I was just standing there. I turned around and Allen was sitting by himself. I smiled and turned back around, I knew that he was married.
t-it's funny how u knew, but yet your still telling me that your about to have his baby.
a-that's what I'm saying.
t-shut up. go ahead and finish.
k-I was standing there when someone tapped me on my shoulder, I turned around and it was him.
t-he approached u?
k-yes. so he told me that he was lonely and he needed someone to talk to and that I should come and sit with him. We were talking and what not when he was like u should come chill wit me at my hotel. I asked him if he was married.
t-and what did he say?
k-he said that he was when he was in Philly but he was in Houston now and that he was single.
t-really.
a-man what is u talking about? Tee I swear she lying.
t-let her finish!
k-so we were talking for a little while and next thing I knew we were in his hotel room. One thing led to another, and we ended up sleeping together. After it was over he asked me for my number and I gave it to him. he said that he would be calling me every time he was in my area so I should keep a look out. I didn't know that it was going to go down like this . I didn't think I was going to get pregnant or that anything would come of it, I thought it was just going to be a one night thing and that would be that. As soon as he was out of town that it would be over, but when my friend stopped coming I knew something was up and when I found out I was scared, I don't mean to cause no trouble I just thought that he should know. No disrespect, I just thought that he should know that he was going to be a daddy again.
a- I ain't about to be nobody damn daddy except for the 2 kids that's upstairs.
t-(crying)Allen why did u do this to me?
a-what? I didn't do anything. she’s lying I'm telling u.
t-no she's not that story sounded to true and that does sound like something u would say.
a-so u mean to sit here and tell me that you're going to take some hoe's words over ya own husband?.....................

ok I added a lil something, someone can take it from there.

[ December 07, 2002: Message edited by: Ivy'sSk8terChik ]
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 08, 2002 3:52 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

THAT WAS HOTT!
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 08, 2002 4:08 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

YEAH THAT WAS HOT...... HOT TA DEAF...... ON FIRE.. OOOOOOO.. WE NEED A HOSE... OH SORRY I GOT CARRIED AWAY.. BUT CONTINUE!!!
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 08, 2002 4:09 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

This is hot
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 08, 2002 7:09 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

IAM FEELIN THIS STORY!!..KEEP IT ROLLIN...MUCH LUV AND GOD BLESS,ANSWER_AI
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 08, 2002 7:14 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I gone try again...

k-look, obviously ya'll got some stuff to talk about cause she don't look happy
a-shutup and get out my house now
t-don't get mad cause you was the one lyin
a-whatever t, i'll take a test, i don't care
k-that's funny cause i was watchin maury the other day and i called in to tell my story
t-what day?
k-huh?
t-i said what day?
k-i can schedule it on one of his next shows
a-this is some stuff, i tell you

(Keisha leaves and T is still cryin, Ann comes downstairs to talk to Allen)

an-what is this about allen?
a-mama that girl was lyin to t i swear
an-allen don't play wit me, i can still whoop you i don't care how big you are
a-i know mama
an-and you better stop gettin smart nigga
a-okay
an-tawanna if you don't shutup cryin

(T runs up the stairs and falls on the bed)

an-this ain't no soap opera girl
t-allen thinks it is
an-how do you know he slept with that girl?
t-i don't
an-then why are you accusing him?

Tell me what ya'll thought...
Anybody can add on from here!!!
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 08, 2002 4:26 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

IM FEEELIN THAT 4 REAL. GREAT WORK GYRL!
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 08, 2002 9:20 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by allen_iverson's_mistress:
the man with deuce and the other lil boy is allen's stepfather(i think)shoot his mama don't play around

and this is ra

[ December 07, 2002: Message edited by: allen_iverson's_mistress ]




Damn, that Ann's fiance?!! Shhhiiiiiitttttt! That man is fine. Shoot, I wonder if he got a brother over 30 (that looks just like him).

Girl, did you have an invite to the wedding cuz I ain't never seen some of these pictures on the net. I'm looking for either a nice wedding photo of Tawanna and Allen or a nice family photo to use as a wallpaper. Got any ideas? Thanks.
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 08, 2002 10:58 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

That was tight, Ivy on Maury . I can't wait to see how this is gonna turn out.
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 08, 2002 11:18 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Yall are so talented I'm so proud of yall.
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 08, 2002 11:38 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by ms_ksw:

Damn, that Ann's fiance?!! Shhhiiiiiitttttt! That man is fine. Shoot, I wonder if he got a brother over 30 (that looks just like him).

Girl, did you have an invite to the wedding cuz I ain't never seen some of these pictures on the net. I'm looking for either a nice wedding photo of Tawanna and Allen or a nice family photo to use as a wallpaper. Got any ideas? Thanks.



I WISH I HAD AN INVITE TO THE WEDDING, BUT JUST GO TO THIS ALLEN IVERSON YAHOO GROUP CALLED ALLEN IVERSON 4EVER. THAT'S WHERE A LOT OF THE WEDDING PICS ARE. DID SOMEONE POST THE PICS THAT ARE/WERE ON MY SIG OVER THERE?


[ December 08, 2002: Message edited by: allen_iverson's_mistress ]
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PostPosted: Mon Dec 09, 2002 5:51 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

(I can't think of anything to write for the in-between time but Iverson is leavin from a home game talkin to Eric...)

a-wassup dog?
e-nuttin, you did good tonight dogg
a-yeah thanks
e-why you buggin?
a-man this girl told t she was pregnant by me
e-what, you ain't go out like that did you?
a-naw she was lyin fo real though dogg
e-ohhh, i'll see you at practice thursday
a-naw dogg you won't believe this but she takin me to the maury show on thursday like i'm a hoe or somethin
e-dang!
a-i know...

(Allen gets in his Benz and is pullin out of the First Union Center parkin lot gettin ready to go home to T who is watchin Love and Basketball)

a-hey boo
t-hi allen
a-why you sound like you got an attitude?
t-i don't know maybe it's jus you
a-okay whatever
t-i'm about to go to bed
a-alright where are my kids?
t-upstairs sleepin or somethin
a-i'll see you tommorrow then
t-okay allen can you jus shutup talkin to me and do what you gotta do, like you do any other time?
a-what?! why you trippin, what's up t?

Tell me what ya'll thought...
Anybody can take it from here...
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AIGirl3
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PostPosted: Mon Dec 09, 2002 5:54 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I'm mad I was jus lookin back at what I wrote and Eric and my man were callin each other dogg way too much, sorry about that ya'll it sounded kinda corny wit all then doggs in their conversation...
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PostPosted: Mon Dec 09, 2002 3:15 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

It was tight.
t- Wut the f***? Why all of sudden you got all these damn questions. Im watchin a movie.
a- Can I watch it wit you?
t- Go watch it over that hoe house you got pregnant.
a- I told you she lyin.
t- Yea Allen wuteva.
a- I aint goin on no damn Maury show.
t- I know you aint.
a- Well then you betta tell that girl she aint takin yo man on no Maury Show.
t- Hell naw. You tell the hoe.
a- Damn baby the girl lyin.
t- How I know that?
a- Damn believe me this once please.
t- Allen maybe if you wouldnt be sleepin around so much wit all these different females I'd prolly believe you.
a- Well damn. Will you believe me dis one time and tell that hoe not to take me on the show. I aint her baby daddy I dont care wut she say. I aint neva seen the girl a day in my life. Until the other day.
t- I'll talk to her. Cause you are Allen Iverson. You prolly dont wanna mess up the
GREAT reputation you have.
a- Yea dats right.
t- Ill see wut I can do.
a- You fa real.
t- Yea damn. Get the f*** out my face.
a- Nope.
(he sits down beside her and lys in her lap)
a- I love you.
t- Boy dont get all sweet wit me. Cause you aint gettin nothin tonite.
a- Its like that.
t- Boy shut up.
(the phone rings its for T but Al answers and its her cousin Nia)
a- Hello
n- Hello hey Allen wuz up?
a- who is dis?
n- nia fool.
a- damn you sound diffrent.
n- yea wuteva but I heard you got some grl pregnant.
a- nope she lyin.
n- yea right. where white baby.
a- on the couch.
(yall can continue I gotta go catch the bus. But I'm go put some tight stuff on here later, dat wuz just a warm up)
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Mrs. Iverson4eva
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 2:23 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

a who is nia??im lost
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 2:34 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

everybody adding on it was tight and i am glad yall keep adding on cuz i get busy at times but i want the story to keep going and yall give me a break by adding on so thanx.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 4:07 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

gul,this story is tight i will soon try to add on if thats cool with you but right now im at the library cause my internet is cut off but hoola back if you fell the need[B][/B]
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 4:57 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

n-well can I talk to her please?
a-yea hold on, a brotha gotta get to that side of the couch
n-move ya basketball playin ass a little quicker
a-shut up, here go T , Punk.
n-meet me by the buses at 2:15 I got ya punk.
a-yea ok.bye
t-hey
n-hey white baby
t-what did I tell y'all about calling me white? I'm black just like the rest of y'all.
n-someone is pissed or p.m.sing
t-fucc u
n-yo what is wrong with u?
t-everything. people been calling her every damn 5 minutes to ask about this gurl being pregnant by Allen, and it's starting to really irk a sista.
n-u know people are nosey they just want to know what’s going on.
t-yea sometimes I wish he wasn't so famous
n-stop lying
t-ok so what u caught me!
(the other line clicks)
t-ai yo Nia hold on it's someone on the other line. I swear if the first words out of they mouth is about that damn girl.
n-just answer it,
t-ok, (she clicks over) hello?
(some girl in a nasty ass stank voice )
y-is Ivy there?
t-who is this?
y-who is this?
t-how u gonna call my house and ask who this is?
y-this is yazmin is Ivy there or what?
t-bitch who is u gettin smart with?
y-bitch? who is u talkin to? look hoe put my man on the phone before I whoop your ass right along with his for having some trick answering his phone.
t-this is his wife.
y-girl please he don't have no wife. He got a baby moms, well 2 actually, and he don't be on it like that with neither one of them.
t-who told u this, because last time I checked he was married to me.
y-he told me.
t-when?
y-don't worry about it. look is he there cause u are seriously wasting my time, and I don't spend time talking to lames.
t-he here, hold on. ALLEN!
a-(running back in the living room)what up ma?
t-answer the phone and u tell me.
a-hello?
y-hey boo.
a-who the hell is this?
y-don't even try to play me, u know who this is.
a-yazmin?
(tawanna gettin even more pissed by the minute. Allen notices and takes his convo in the other room. this really pisses tawanna off)
y-who else.
a-yo I told u not to call me at this number.
y-well u didn't answer my page and u didn't answer ur cell so this was like a last resort.
a-well what do u want?
y-what I always want.
a-well I can't help u tonight, I'm already in enough s*** with my wife and with u calling I know I just added gasoline to the fire.
y-wait u married?
a-yea.
y-u lied to me?
a-look, I ain't got time to go into this with u right now. I’ll call u back.
y-yo?
a-(sounding irritated)what?
y-(laughing)I'll tape u on Maury.
a-whatever.
(Allen walks back into the living room and tee isn't in there. he goes upstairs and checks on the kids, they’re knocked out. he goes in his room and sees tee stomping around like a madd woman packing her stuff)
a-what are u doing?
t-are u blind? what does it look like I'm doing?Leaving,leaving,leaving.
a-why?
t-u know why.
a-man that was just ma friend. She want me to hook her up with Raja.
t-yea sure. that's why she was telling me on the phone that u don't have a wife, I’m just a baby moms, one of 2.
a-what?
t-nigga u heard me. stop acting deaf. that is ya kid. And since I'm just ya baby moms and I don't mean anything, than obviously u don't need me here.
a-why are u spazin?there you go listenin to everyone but me.
t-cause u haven't said nothing for me to believe. that's the second person to tell me the baby is yours and all u keep saying is "aww baby she lying, word to me she lying “do I have stupid written across my forehead?
a-(laughin)can we not get started with the forehead.
t-shut up. that's your problem now you're so childish.
a-where are u going?It's damn near 12 in the morning.think about this.
t-nigga I'm grown I know what I'm doing, and I do think unlike u,at least with my brain that is.
a-what's that supposed to mean?
t-it means that if u thought with your brain half the time instead of ya dick u wouldn't be in the predicament now.
a-(lets it sink in) fucc u. hurry up get ya s*** and get the fucc out!
t-nigga u gonna throw me out after all this s*** u done to me? fucc me nigga? fucc you!
(they're both screaming back and fourth. T gets the rest of her stuff, grabs her keys and leaves. Ivy watches her pull out the driveway, and when he turns around. Ti and Deuce are sitting at the top of the stairs)
Ti-where's mommy going?.............................................................
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 5:23 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

NOW THAT'S WHAT U CALL TALENT..... YA'LL ARE DOING REAL GOOD KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!!! HOLLA BACK
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 5:34 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

oooooh shiiiiitttt!!! Allen was madd gangsta in the end of that last piece....I mean in just about every story....Tawanna always says the last word and allen usually ends up looking gritty but its gangsta that he's finally standing up for himself.But I honestly hope that they eventually work it out in the story.

~*~MizD~*~
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 5:50 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

That was hott, now I'm gone add on some more cause ya'll got me hooked now...

a-she went to the store tiaura go back to bed
ti-the store probably ain't open
a-tiaura jus go to sleep babe
ti-alright daddy i love you
a-i love you too

(Allen calls T on her cell )

a-t what is wrong with you?
t-nothin except my husband has 2 other women
on the side and they're callin my house
a-they are lyin and i told you yazmine want a hook up wit raja
t-he is a grown man and he can get himself a girl, ya'll ain't young no more, life ain't a game no more nigga what you thought?
a-t you must think it's a game cause i'm tryin to work this out and somethin is wrong with yo attitude
t-allen think about what you put me through
a-thought about it already, and it ain't no worse than gettin our kids kidnapped and you almost gettin raped
t-and that was my fault?
a-show wadn't mine
t-whatever all, i'm comin back home to get some sleep in the guest room
a-aiight bye

(Allen puts some slow jams on in the guest room and throws some rose petals on the bed, T walks in the house and puts her stuff in the room and goes into the guest room)

a-hey baby
t-this must have been how you got them other tricks pregnant huh?
a-let's not start t
t-nigga we never finished
a-whatever t forget it
t-no say what you was gone say
a-you ain't finna make me apologize now cause you want some from me t
t-allen what were you gonna say?
a-sorry and they were lyin
t-can i have a hug
a-let a nigga think about it...

Let me know what ya'll thought and anybody can add on from here!!!
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 6:02 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

both yall i am feeling the story! it is so hott and i think that yall are doing a great job! i will add on a soon as possible so sit tight cause i am brain storming and i will add on as soon as i think of something good.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 6:10 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Thanks Nieceye?!?!
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 7:57 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Why in the stories yall always let Tawanna go back tp Allen after he did her wrong and all that stuff.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 3:21 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Becuz its a story, not factual.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 10, 2002 11:44 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

It was tight.
t- let you think about it?
a- baby I'm jus playin come here.
(they hug)
t- I love you.
a- I love you too.
(they do wutever they do. the next day its around 7:30 in the evening. allen gettin all clean finna leave, he in the bathroom. Nia and t in the front room watchin tv allen comes in there)
a- T how I look
t- You look straight where you finna go?
a- To the store. Where else?
t- Boy dont play me for no fool.
n- T let him go
(she givin t a crazy look)
a- thanks nia.
n- yea bye.
t- bye baby.
(he go gets in his car. they stand up)
n- lets follow this nigga cause he aint finna be doin my cuz wrong.
(they wait til he pulls off then gets in Nia's car. They follow him. he rings yazmen's door bell she opens the door and at first they talkin then they kiss. Then she lets him. tawanna pulls off quick, takes nia home chills ther for a while. when she gets home allen is on his cell, he hangs it up when he sees her)
a- where you been?
(she walks up to him)
t- You a lyin cheatin son of a bitch the way you do me boy I'm tired of takin your s***. See I know all about those fast hoes that you be fuckin. You really need to stop it. You hear me?
a- Yea, Why you trippin on s*** you dont even know about believin evry damn thing you hear about.
t- Thats nothin that I heard.
a- wait a minute just hear me out. you dont even know what I be doin or where I be.
t- See you wrong today I busted you going into some girls house.
a- and wuts that spose to mean.
t- nothin till you kissed her in her mouth!
Boy lets stop waistin time its pretty clear that u a lie. Im tired of sittin round here wit you givin me all yo phony stories.
(tawanna walks up to her room he follows her)
a- baby wut you sayin?
t- Allen read between the lines. Do I have to spell it out for you I'm sayin goodbye.
(she starts packin her things)
a- All girl quit playin you did this s*** yesterday, I'm the only thing you got.
t- Your the only thing I got but then I must not have a lot.
a- Girl stop playin
t- Look just call my lawyer he will make the arrangements.
a- You want a divorce. (he think she playin)
t- Hell yes cause I'm fed up wit this.
a- How you just go leave like this.
t- Because you werent true to me.
a- Baby can we talk about it?
t- Wut is there to talk about, you done hurt me too many times, you torn me up and burnt me down.
a- Baby girl I'm sorry.
t- Sorry?
a- Grl you go make me lose it.
t- now wait I suggest you calm down and dont do nothin stupid.
a- Baby I just dont know wut I would do if I was to lose you.
(it gets quiet)
a- Baby
t-(she starts cryin) I'm sorry allen I'm leavin
(she gets her stuff and leaves. allen just sits down on the bed lookin stupid)
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 12:36 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

That was hott Ta'Shanda!

After Tawanna goes downstairs and starts puttin her stuff in Nia's trunk Allen comes downstairs...

a-t wait a minute, where you gone go?
t-anywhere away from you
a-why it's gotta be like this, girl come on
t-why did you have to be like that?
a-be like what, yo friends be lyin
t-my friends didn't tell me nothin, i already told you that i seen you kissin on the same girl who called here tryin to check me cause she said she was with you
a-okay if this is how it's gone be i need your lawyer's number
t-fine, it's in the 2nd drawer of the nightstand under the black book
a-aiight, see you when i see you
t-bye allen our love was good
a-yup

(Allen goes into the house and slams the door
he sits on the couch lookin bummed then he jus starts cryin and then calls his mom up)

an-hello
a-momma?
an-boy what's wrong now?
a-me and t are gettin a divorce
t-what happened this time?
a-she claimed that she seen me cheatin on her
an-allen were you with another girl?
a-yeah momma but she jus wanted a hookup wit raja, my boy that used to play for us
an-allen don't lie to me, that boy is grown and kinda cute too he can get his own women
a-but momma i didn't mean to though she was jus callin my name and i didn't want her to think i wasn't good or nothin
an-well i hope she was worth your marriage
a-nope
an-don't catch an attitude with me cause the stank didn't please you like you wanted
a-aiight mama, the kids are probably out of school so i gotta go get em
an-allen ya'll forgot again and that school called my house tellin me they had a half day so i went and got them kids
a-why didn't you call me?
an-allen your cell would have been ringin off the hook if you could have heard it but it was probably in yo pants on the floor of that girl's bedroom
a-momma i'll be over in a little while
an-i love you son
a-love you too ma
an-bye
a-bye

(Allen goes upstairs and picks up some of clothes that T dropped on the floor when she was packin)

Tell me what ya'll thought, and anybody can add on!!!
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 1:10 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

i know im a lil late but the story before the last one was from that nivea and r.kelly song thats tight!!
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 1:41 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

i'm typin somethin up for ya'll write now
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 1:57 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

you did good gurl

when he picked up the clothes she dropped, a short letter to tawanna from his ex-best friend(that included a naked pic of him) and a tape of what they did when allen was gone, fell out.

The letter read: "Hey baby, what's been goin on? I just been thinkin about what we did at your house when your "husband" was gone. When we gone meet up again, cuz i can't wait to f*** yo ass one mo time! We been doin this for nine years. You know Tiaura could be mines!! You still gone divorce that nigga and get da money? I'm tellin ya, i'm like ll cool j, s*** i can luv u better. Well here's a pic of what chu been missin! and look at them funny expression you was makin on da tape!! i got you wet already huh?" luv ya, Terrance

Allen: this bitch been cheatin on me too. For nine muthafuckin years? she finna take my money? Tiaura can't be mines?!! maybe we need to go to maury, jenny jones, or ricki lake!!
allen calls his moms and tells her don't let no one get the kids and he goes to search for tawanna. when he finds her, he sees her with terrance broke ass.

what ya'll think?

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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 4:13 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was real good. the suspense is hott.
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 4:43 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Is anyone going to continue because the suspence is killing me now ya'll.

~*~MizD~*~
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 5:02 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

thank ya'll. i'm thinkin on somethin right now.


[ December 10, 2002: Message edited by: allen_iverson's_mistress ]
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 5:09 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Allen_Iverson's_Mistress...what happened to the pictures attached to your signature?

~*~MizD~*~
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 5:11 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

they still there, i just unchecked show signature
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 5:13 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Oh my bad.......


~*~MizD~*~

[ December 10, 2002: Message edited by: *MizDiamonds* ]
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 5:28 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

sorry yall i cant think of anything but i have tried to write some but i dont know what to add. well lata i will add on a.s.a.p.
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 5:38 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Allen punches tha snot out of Terrance
A: What tha f*** is this! I find you with one of my fuckin friends..

T: Man!Whateva, you cheated on me nigga!
A: Yeah bitch you been fuckin dis nigga for 9 damn years!!
T:How did you kno!??
A:I kno now stupid ass!(Allen grabs Tee's arm)
T:NIGGA get tha hell off me!!
A: NO we gon talk about this s***!
A:I also kno dat my daughter might not even be mine!
T:Allen dats not true!
A:Yea what tha f*** eva bitch save tha drama.
T:Let me GO!!
A: Hell no you comin wit me!
YOu guys continue(I hoped ya like it)
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 6:26 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

oooh...so violent...but I'm liking it...I'm liking...I'm really really liking.....naah I'm just playing....but I really liked that last parr though.


I'm going to continue.

Tawanna:Allen I swear that if you don't get your hands off me...
Allen:What....what the f*** are you going to do about it Tawanna....(smiling)you know its amusing to me how you complain and try to kick my ass everytime you find out that I'm messin around but yet your ass is even grimier than me (looking her directly in her face with a serious expression)you've been playing me all along and to make matters worse your doing it with my damn friend......how could you do that Tawanna?I really loved you and you just killed that.
Tawanna Teary eyed)But you cheated
too Allen...
Allen sad)Yeah I did and I'm man enough to admit that....but I did it with strangers you had to go and hit really close to home....you did it with this nigga(pointing to Terrence who is still on the floor)he used to be my homeboy but now I know that he aint s***!!!and you aint s***
either Tawanna(Allen begins to walk away)...f*** both of ya'll...ya'll deserve eachother.
Tawanna crying and grabbing on Allens sleve)Allen wait...I'm sorry....baby I'm sorry....I didn't mean any of it I swear I didn't.
(Allen just continues to walk toward his car meanwhile Tawanna is trailing behind him in tears)
Tawanna:Allen!!!
Allen Turns around just to say a few last words to the woman that he once thought that he loved)I'll call your lawyer in the and you should get the divorce papers by next week so just come and get your s*** out of my house tomorrow.Oh and I'm taking Tiaura to get a D.N.A test tomorrow...I have a lot of un-answered questions that are about to get answered.(Allen gets in his car and pulls off)
Tawanna speechless)
* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *
Tawanna couldn't believe that this was real...she could never picture Allen finding out about her mistake,she couldn't believe that he was treating her like this......people say that "You never miss your water until your well runs dry" and that was what Tawanna was experiencing right now at this very moment...all she felt was pain in her heart...she was always used to getting her way in situations and having the last word in arguments with her husband but now he had the last word and they weren't words of pleasure and forgiveness(the words "I'm sorry" or "can you forgive me") that she was so used to hearing.
Its funny how the tables turn in the blink of an eye....
Now she finally realized how much she really loved and wanted to be with Allen.
Her once happy family was now broken apart.


~*~MizD~*~

I know that its kind of corny but I tried ya'll I tried that whole getting in focus and zoning out garbage and I hope that it was worth it so please tell me what ya'll think.

[ December 10, 2002: Message edited by: *MizDiamonds* ]
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 6:30 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

man for some reason when they get tha dna test, i wanna write that tiaura is not allen's nor terrances..but i gotta go right now

[ December 10, 2002: Message edited by: allen_iverson's_mistress ]
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 11, 2002 7:11 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

dang pleez finish da story yall im really into it. keep doin yall thang!
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 12:04 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Miz D the last part of they story had me about to go in 2 tears! it was hott but ne wayz i am gonna continue:

allen goes home and he is sitting on the couch in the dark thinking to himself. he was thinking on him and tawanna's wedding and on how much he loved her and his kids in question. he sat there for about an hour till the phone rang. Its tawnna:

a- hello?
t- allen listen 2 me.
a- look i dont wanna do this right now.
t- wait give me a chance to explain.
a- no girl i am sick of this s***. its time 4 u to grow the f*** up. we getting a divorce and i am taking tiaura 4 that dna test. i am tired of being in a marriage based on lies and secrets. you cheat on me and i cheat on you. no need 2 try and patch things up cuz the s*** is not going to work ok?
t- baby please you cant do this.
a- yea i can, and ne wayz u the one that wanted to leave ne ways.
t- i wasnt serious i just wanted to make you sweat 4 a while so maybe you could be true 2 me.
a- true 2 u? u the one fucking wit my friend so dont talk about being true. u probally up at his crib now.
t- i have 2 be cuz i have no place to go! baby pleez take me back! i am so sorry.
a- hell no!

the next morning he takes tiaura for the dna test and he is sitting at home waiting 4 the the doctor 2 call with the results.


well i know it isnt much but somebody caN go 4rm here. i am gonna continue later so thanx 4 adding on yall peacee.

keep it gangsta
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 12:18 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

damn niecey...how are you just going to leave me hanging like that?
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 12:25 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

leave u hanging? miz d i was saying the story u wrote was off the hook, hott, excellent whateva u wanna call it. keep up the good work girl!
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 12:28 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

oh neva mind girl i see what u are saying!
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 12:37 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

AWWWWW dat was rollin like the midwest plains.I liks dat!
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 12:41 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

NOW YA'LL KNOW I'M FINNA WRITE SOMETHIN ALREADY.
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 12:48 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that is so hott but dont leave me hanging i can't wait to read the next part
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 1:22 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ALLENS FRIENDS(WHO DON'T KNOW NOTHIN) ARE THERE. HE HAS A FEELIN THAT ONE OF THEM WHO DON'T KNOW s*** WILL CONFESS....SOMETHIN

THE DOCTOR CALLS: (ALLEN PUTS IT ON SPEAKER PHONE) MR. IVERSON(HE READIN ALL THEM NUMBERS LIKE ON MAURY) TIAURA IS NOT YOURS!!

ALLEN STARTS THROWIN s*** AROUND WHILE HIS FRIENDS ARE TRYIN TO CALM HIM DOWN.

MEANWHILE AT TERRANCES HOUSE THEIR IS A LIL ARGUEMENT GOIN ON BETWEEN TAWANNA AND TERRANCE ABOUT WHAT HAPPENED EARLIER!!
(TERRANCE IN THE BACKGROUND CALLIN TAWANNA ALL KINDS OF BITCHES AND HO'S)
T: HEL...
A: YOU SORRY BITCH, TIAURA ISN'T MINE. YOU GOT 10 MINUTES TO GET THE REST OF YO s*** OUT OF MY MUTHAFUCKIN HOUSE. AND WHILE YOU AT IT YOU BETTA CALL THE FIREMEN TO COME PUT OUT THIS FIRE(HE SET SOME OF THE STUFF ON FIRE)
TAWANNA: (CRYING) TIAURA ISN'T YOURS?

TERRANCE HEARS THIS AND ALL OF A SUDDEN SAYS: YOU KNOW WHAT TAWANNA, I'M SICK OF YO s***!! GET THE f*** OUT OF MY HOUSE AND I WANT A DNA TEST TO SEE IF TIAURA IS MINES!! YOU THINK I FORGOT ABOUT WHAT YOU TOLD ME ABOUT YOU AND TREY( HIS CURRENT BEST FRIEND) TERRANCE IS LOUD TALKIN NOW: YOU REMEMBER WHEN YOU TOLD ME THAT YOU AND HIM GOT SO DRUNK THAT YA'LL FUCKED IN HIS JEEP?!!! WHAT YOU THOUGHT THAT I WOULD FORGET HUH? WELL, YOU CAN FORGET ABOUT ME BEIN YO LL COOL J. s*** YOU DIDN'T KNOW I GUESS. I'M LIKE PETEY PABLO, I SUCK EM, f*** EM, SEND EM HOME!!"
ALLEN: YOU FUCKIN TREY TOO? OH HELLLLLLLL NAWWW.
TREY IS ABOUT TO LEAVE.
A: NAWW TREY DON'T LEAVE
TAWANNA: BABY I'M SORRY. IT WAS JUST ONE NIGHT.
ALLEN AND TREY START LAUGHIN REALLY, REALLY,LOUD (AND IT'S THA SIGNAL) CUZ THE TRUTH IS NOW OUT!!!!
A: YOU KNOW WHAT? YOU TRIED TO ACT LIKE LIKE YOU WERE INNOCENT(SPELL CHECK) BUT YOU'RE NOT. YOU COULD'VE AT LEAST DENIED TRIED TO DENY IT, BUT YOU PLAYED YO SELF
TERRANCE STARTS LAUGHIN REALLY, REALLY LOUD TOO.
TAWANNA: WHAT'S SO FUNNY, THIS IS NOT FUNNY. MY DAUGHTER NEEDS TO KNOW WHO HER FATHER IS
A: IT DIDN'T SEEM LIKE YOU'VE BEEN WORRIED FOR THE PAST NINE YEARS. YOU KNOW WHAT TAWANNA? CAN YOU KEEP A SECRET BABE? I BEEN HAD A DNA TEST FOR TIAURA!!! WEEKS AFTER SHE WAS BORN. THIS WHOLE THING IS A SET UP. FROM THE BEGINNING. YOU ARE SO FUCKIN STUPID. I GUESS THAT MAKES YOU WONDER WHY I STAYED WITH YA FOR SO LONG HUH? I GOT MY REASONS.
TAWANNA: YOU HAD ME KIDNAPPED?
ALLEN STOPPED LAUGHIN AND STARTS BEIN SERIOUS: COME GET YOUR s***, NOW!!!
HE SLAMS THE PHONE DOWN, AND TERRANCE IS LOOKIN AT HER LAUGHIN.
HOW COULD YOU DO ME LIKE THIS?
TERRANCE: WOMAN, YOU REMEMBER WHAT N*SYNC SAID?
TAWANNA LOOKIN STUPID: NO
TERRANCE: BYE BYE BYE

WHAT YA'LL THINK

[ December 11, 2002: Message edited by: allen_iverson's_mistress ]
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 2:06 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

dayum that is so mean!! cant tawanna or somebody be having a dream about this or something??
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 2:10 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

i don't think it's mean cuz she alway's tries to make it seem like she was all innocent. this isn't a dream, and it's somethin that makes this story different from the rest. and remember, he has his reaons so the next person that writes could point out those reasons and maybe they will go to counseling(spell check) or somethin
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 3:31 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

yall i am really feelin the story but we should make it a dream cuz this so scary movie s***! and it do kinda seem like a nightmare and i will add a little something to make it just as interesting so here i go:

tawanna wakes up from the dream. she is at terrance's house and she is sleeping in his bed(scandal) but he is on his counch sleeping. tawanna wakes up screaming:

t- AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!
runs to his room 2 see what the problem is.
te- whats wrong???
t- ohhh i just had a nightmare. what time is it?
te- 2:00.
t- damn i slept that long?
te- yea i was just about to come and check on you to see if you had died or some s***.
t- well i am bout to go home to see if allen has got the results from the test yet.
te- aiight.

tawanna goes home and gets in with her key. allen has already taken tiaura and he is sitting down waiting for the doctor to call and tell him the results. well she walks in:

t- hey.
a- hey? thats all you gonna say?
t- im sorry but pleez dont kick me out!
a- (laughing and 2 nervous to be mean) im not gonna kick you out girl, just wanna know the results to the test.
t- you know no matter what you are still tiaura's daddy.
a- i know, that is my baby girl.
t- but i love you and back then i was young and i didnt know what i was doing. but now that we are married and all grown up i think i can-
a- (cuttin her off) lets not even talk about that now.
t- so i can sit here with you and wait for the results?
a- yea but if she not mine i want you to get your s*** and go.
t- (looking hurt) ok.

3 hours pass without them saying much to each other and then finally the phone rings. allen answers it.

a- hello?
doc- umm mr. iverson?
a- yes?
doc- i just wanted to let you know that the results of the test came back and i have to inform you that in fact the results are... negative.
a- okay.
doc- bye.
a- bye.

allen puts the phone down gently.

t- so...
a- shes not my child.
t- AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH (crying)!!!!!!!!!! IT CANT BE TRUE SHE LOOKS JUST LIKE YOU. YOU COULD BE HER TWIN! SHE LOOKS EXACTLY LIKE YOU! OMG!!! ALLEN I AM SO SORRY!
a- shutup damn! get out!

allen pushes tawanna out the house . tawanna goes to sheka's house. (her friend)

allen is sitting in the housecrying by the phone not believing that his daughter the little girl he always took care of was not biologically his. he couldnt believe after all these years of taking care of her was wasted because she wasnt his. he is sitting there then the phone rings. he is tired and he doesnt want to answer it but he does anyway. its the doctor.

a- hhhheeeelllooo? (stuttering)
doc- mrs. iverson?
a- yea this him.
doc- well when i saw the child today and i was thinking why is this guy even getting her tested because she looks exactly like him. but when the results were negative i was shocked. so i went and reviewed them agian and it seems they have gotten mixed up with someone else and the test says 99.9% that the girl is in fact your daughter.
a- (shocked)....... ummmm thanx sir thank you so much.
doc- youre welcome.

allen is so happy he is jumping up and down screaming and then tiaura comes down the stairs. ( her and deucee were taking a nap). allen starts hugging and kissing her.

ti- what daddy?
a- baby girl i love! dont ever let anybody tell you daddy doesnt love you!
ti- okayyyy...
deuce comes down the stairs.
de- whats all the noise daddy?
a- i love you son!

allen finishes hugging and kissing the kids and he calls tawanna. ummmmmmmmmmm!!

well hope yall liked it. i know it may have alot of mistakes and s*** but i dont feel like correcting it so there it is.


keep it gangsta
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 3:41 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

i was reading it over and i put mrs iverson??!!!???? it is supossed 2 be mr iverson but i know yall are smart so yall could have figured it out! well i g2g

keep it gangsta
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 4:23 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

well my fault. i don't wanna write no scary movies but thanks for sayin you were feelin it.
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 4:52 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was tight nieceye_n_iverson!!
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 5:00 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Man, I had my popcorn ready for this one. This story is da bomb!!!

AIM, you always do your thug thizzle, whether it's a story or those pictures. Nieceye-n-Iverson (sp), girl you're just a young Terry McMillan cuz you be rollin' with these stories.

Ya'll should go over to the Real World story and get it crunked (after this one ends though). All in all, mad props to both of ya'll.
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 5:41 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

how do yall put pics on yalls signature from yahoo groups?
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 6:43 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by ms_ksw:
Man, I had my popcorn ready for this one. This story is da bomb!!!

AIM, you always do your thug thizzle, whether it's a story or those pictures. Nieceye-n-Iverson (sp), girl you're just a young Terry McMillan cuz you be rollin' with these stories.

Ya'll should go over to the Real World story and get it crunked (after this one ends though). All in all, mad props to both of ya'll.



thanks girl.. i'm workin on dat real world story
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 12, 2002 2:55 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

i will continue lata....
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 13, 2002 1:46 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

(Allen is madd happy to find out that baby girl is his and he dials the number as fast as he can)

a-c'mon and pick up the phone.
(the phone rings a couple more times and finally someone answers it)
q-hello?
a-yea tawanna?
q-naw nigga this ain't tawanna
a-who the fucc is this?
v-her man.
a-who is that?
q-me nigga
a-does this punk ass me have a name?
q-I ain't no punk, u better watch who u talking to, my name is Quentin and you better learn it because ya wife gonna be screaming it later.
a-nigga u better watch who u talking to I'll beat ya ass like u stole from my mama.
q-fucc u and ya mama.
a-nigga iight, where's my wife at?
q-nigga don't worry about it.
a- u gon tell me before I hang up this phone.
q-she suckin ma dick nigga,
( Q hangs up and Allen is pissed off)
a- this chick messin wit some other dude? what the f***?
(the phone rings)
a-(angrily)hello?
t-hey allen its me Tawanna what's for wrong?
a-bitch who the hell is Quentin?
t-what are u talking about?
a-I just called your phone and some nigga named Quentin answered.
t-what?
a-ain't no what, who was he?
t-baby,
a-naw fucc it
t-let me explain.
a-no Come get the rest of your s*** and get the fucc out of my house.
t-baby
(Allen slams the phone down and the kids are looking at him)
a- don't say nothing, go get ya coats so u can go see grandma.
ti and D- ok………………………………..........................


Ok I added a little something.
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 13, 2002 1:50 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was 2 hott!
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 13, 2002 2:04 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

hurry up wit da story!!!!!!!!!
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 13, 2002 2:46 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

even though that was good i think that you all should have stayed with the story line of tiaura not being allens and that is what could have led up to the july 3rd incident but anyway that was just my opinion to you know kind of switch the stories up from the same old story lines dont get me wrong they be funy as hell but this could have just been something different but i think the real world story will be different
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 13, 2002 2:55 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

i ll continue this afternoon...
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 14, 2002 12:11 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

allen takes deuce and tiaura to his mothers house and he trys to find tawanna and but he is unsuccesful so he goes back home. he gets bored and he is really stressed so he calls up a hoe. you know...the girl kesha.

kesha answers her phone:

k- hello?
a- what up girl?
k- who dis?
a- ai, girl!
k- o what do you you want????
a- can you come over?
k- is your wife home?
a- why the hell would would i say come over if my wife was here?
k- well its like im a lying hoe when your wife is around but the one you call up when you need something.
a- look are you coming or not?
k- (sighs) well... okay im on my way.
a- good.

they hang up the phone and kesha comes over. she gives him what he wants and then she is walking out the door about to leave.

k- so what happened wit you and ol'girl?
a- nothin just more drama.
k- iight, well i will see you sooner or lata then. hopefully sooner.
a- iight.

kesha leaves and ai calls tawanna on here cell phone again. he is feeling more relaxed after what kesha just did 4 him.

t- hello?
a- tawanna?
t- oh hey allen whats up?
a- i just wanted to tell you have fun wit ol'boy cuz i dont care. obviously we both have things on our minds other than our marriage.
t- what? (shocked that he isnt demanding where she is by now)
a- yea i dont care what you do with any other man becuz i am just gonna leave you alone cuz i aint gonna let you cheat on me like that and play ur fool.
t- but alllen i did it 4 you!
a- well that was your stupidity. i am not gonna take this from no chic, on the real girl.
t- wait a minute... a chic?
a- yea. you aint got enough respect 4 me after i fathered your children...
t- (cutting him off) wait you sed children. i thought tiaura wasnt yours.
a- o, thats why i called to tell you the doctor called me back and sed the tests got mixed up and that tiaura is mine.
t-4 REEL????
a- yea.
t- are you happy?
a- yea. where you at?
t- (ashamed) q's house.
a- well you can get your stuff later.
t- (sad) okay.
a- iight.
t- allen...
a- what?
t- i still love you. do you still love me?

allen thinking: do i love her?

a- iight i gotta go. (he hangs up in her ear)

*** somebody can add on from here****

[ December 13, 2002: Message edited by: nieceye_n_iverson ]

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PostPosted: Sat Dec 14, 2002 1:43 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Good job everybody
I'm about to add on now...

t-uhhhhhhhhh

(Tawanna is mad after Allen hangs up on her but then she gets off the phone and goes to look for Ann's cell phone number.)

q-excuse you, what are you doin?
t-lookin for somethin
q-what?
t-a phone number to a friend's cell
q-who is this friend hoe?
t-does it matter?
q-yes, now answer before i hurt you
t-excuse me, what did you jus say
q-you heard me fool, get in the bedroom now
t-quentin i'm not even like that no more
q-when did you stop, this morning?
t-i'm callin allen, bump this
q-no you ain't that nigga ain't gone save you

Anyone can continue, and I need thoughts...
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 14, 2002 2:19 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

good job ya'll keep up tha good work..... the story is hittin!!!!!!!!!
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 14, 2002 3:40 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was good ai3 girl...
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 14, 2002 8:45 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ooooooh!,keep it comin, iam anxious to know what happened next..much luv and god bless, answer_ai
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 14, 2002 5:44 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

tawanna and q are in his room basically wrestling. then finally tawanna gets away from him and she gets in her car and goes home. she gets in the house with her key and she is crying an screaming. allen, tiaura, and deuce hear all the noise and they come running downstairs.

t- i cant believe this s*** happenned 2 me again. Q tried 2 rape me allen!
a- naw i am not falling for this s***. you probally making this up so i would take you back but guess what? i aint no damn fool so you cant let yourself out my house just like you let yourself in! and gimme my key bac!
t- allen 4real i am not playing i am serious!
a- GET OUT!

he pushes tawanna out the house and snatches the key out of her hand. tawanna is standing on the porch crying and banging on the door begging 4 him to let her back in.
inside the house:

ti- whats wrong with mommy?
a- nothing princess just go to your room its getting late.
de- but daddy doesnt she love us anymore? why she never here?
a- son, ya mamma does love you it is just that we are having some problems and she dont need to be here now.

tiaura starts crying then deuce.

a- come on yall dont be crying on me now. look its time to go to sleep.

allen takes tiaura and deuce upstairs to their rooms and puts them to sleep. he goes back downstairs and tawanna is now knocking on the back door. he goes and opens the door.

a- look girl, if you dont leave i am calling the police. have you 4 got who's name this house is in?
t- listen, pleez take me back. i dont know what i would do without you. you are my highschool sweetheart and the father of my children. how can you do this to me?
a- you can come in and get some clothes but after that you getting out. i am not gonna let u cheat on me no more girl. you got 10 minutes.
t- okay, okay, 10 minuntes.

they are walking to their room.

t- allen i swear to you on my life that q did try to rape me.
a- (still not believing her)well if you werent over his house being a hoe he couldnt have done it.

tawanna smacks allen as hard as she can.

t- how dare you say that to me after everything thats happened to me today. you dont have to believe me, but being so you are still me husband, i thought you give me some support, and not sit here and call me a hoe!

allen slams he against the wall.

a- bitch dont you ever hit me again!
t- get off me!

she knees him in the place that hurts a man the worst.

a- ima kill you bitch!

*** last part is a little dramatic but if you like it let me know. somebody can continue***

[ December 14, 2002: Message edited by: nieceye_n_iverson ]
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 14, 2002 6:06 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

That was tight, but of course it always is. I'm gonna try and add something, I gotta think first.Nieceye u should go add some on the real world story. That would be tight.

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PostPosted: Sat Dec 14, 2002 10:23 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

that was tight......please continue!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 15, 2002 2:21 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

tawanna runs out the house and drives to her friend sheka's house. she tells her everything.

s- 4 real u kneed him in his...
t- yea, he was disrespecting me.
s- but girl you aint have to take it there.
t- i know i regret it, but i think he may try and hurt me.
s- girl he loves you, he wouldnt want to see u hurt.
t- girl, i dont know cuz he was real mad. i hope he can get over it cuz i still love him.
(door bell rings)
s- oh, thats christy and her man.
t- we finally get to meet him?
s- yea.
(tawanna and sheka go to the door)
s&t- hey girl!
christy- whats up ladies.
t- we been chillin.
s- so this is darrel... we have heard so much about you!
(darrel is staring at tawanna)
dar-....
c- darrel she's talking to you...
d- oh whats up?
(christy notices what he is looking at)
c- since you seen so interested this is tawanna. Ai's wifey.
dar- oh hey.
s- so you just gonna 4 get me?
c- oh her...this is sheka....
s- shut up! (playin)
c- naw darrel, this is my girl sheka.
d- nice to meet you.
s- i know. lets go sit down.
(they go sit down in sheka's living room)
t- so darrel how do you feel about becoming a father? (remember christy is pregnant?..on pg. 4)
d- oh i'on know. nervous.
t- oh, allen was nervous too.
s- yea i remember when you first told him he was about to shyt on himself!!!
t- (laughing) leave my man alone!
d- how does it feel to be married to a millonaire?
t- i dont even really care about his money, i love him 4 him.
s- ummmmm.
t- shut up sheka.
s- what i aint even say nothin.
d- but yea ai is the lucky one to have a wife as fine as you.
t- you are so sweet....
d- and christy showed me some pictures of yall kids, and i am like can you give me some kids that look like that!
(christy looking uncomfortable)
t- (laughing) i wish i could...
d- but on tne real you are gorgeous...
christy- sheka can i see you in private real quick?
(they go into sheka's room)
c- do you see how much tawanna is flirting with him? i just wanna tell them to go get a room!
s- from what i see he is flirting with tawanna...
c- no that is all her, just becuz her and allen are having problems dont mean she gotta try and take my man.
s- girl, you need to calm down overeacting like that.
c- i knew if i brought it up you would take her side when she the one starting shyt!
s- i am not taking anybody's side...lets just drop it.
c- okay whatever.
******meanwhile******
d- you look good girl...
t- thanx. (blushing)
d- what would you do if i kissed you?
t- ummmm....

darrel starts kissing tawanna. sheka and christy walk bac in the living room and darrel and tawanna are still kissing....

well it may be corny, but hey i tried. tell me what u think and feel free 2 add on.

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PostPosted: Sun Dec 15, 2002 10:49 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

All of ya'll did a great job, thank you Nieceye and I think I'm gonna add on...

Ann

t-hello
an-tawanna?
t-yeah?
an-where are you at?
t-in my car on my way home to see if my husband wants me back
an-don't even give me that t you know what you were doin and if i was allen i would have done the same thing
t-and why exactly did you call again?
an-don't get smart with me alright girl?
t-yeah but it's not my fault that he kicked me out
an-tawanna you put his baby daddy title in jeopardy and it's not your fault though huh?
t-ann i'll talk to you later cause i don't need this
an-that's funny cause that's he same thing i told allen when he said he wanted to marry you

(T hangs up the phone and calls Allen so she can tell him about his mother. She didn't really need to tell him anything but she jus wanted to hear his voice again...)

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PostPosted: Mon Dec 16, 2002 2:32 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

everbody it was great, and i was really feeling it so keep up the good work, ima continue:

allen answers the phone:

a- hello?
t- hey.
a- who dis?
t- oh so you dont know my voice now.
a- o, its u. i thought u were kesha (trying 2 make her mad)
t- what...kesha?
a- yea.
t- hold up, we are still married so you dont need to be waiting 4 no kesha to call!
a- look hoe, ,what u want.
t- i need to come home, i got nowhere to go.
a- tough.
t- what?
a- i sed tough, you better find somewhere to sleep.
t- (trying to make him mad) well maybe i can stay with Q, if i give him what he wants...
a- ..... (thinking) dont you gotta finish getting your shyt?
t- well yea i am on my way.
a- iight bye.
t- bye.

allen thinking:
i am gonna beat this bitch ass when she get here...she kicked me in my dick
tawanna knocks on the door, allen lets her in and is being real nice. she gets in the house. allen smacks her and she falls on the floor.

a- bitch i want ya stupid ass to kick me again, no get ya s*** and go!
t- allen how can you-
a- shove that s*** girl!
t- pleez let me explain myself...
a- hell no! get ya s*** and go!


i know it is a little bit but i hope it is good. but i will add on lata but now i gotta go. holla at cha girl!
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PostPosted: Mon Dec 16, 2002 2:35 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

That was good...I'm feeling the hell out of this story right now.


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PostPosted: Mon Dec 16, 2002 8:17 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

they stop and look up when they hear Christy clear her throat.
c-darell! What the hell is this? I leave for one minute and u in here trying to fucc my friend?
d-baby it's not even like that.
t-christy.
s-uh oh.
c-and u T. I thought u was my girl.
t-I am he came on to me.
c-is that true?
d-baby she lying, I would never do anything like that, u about to be a mother to my child.
t-what?
d-u left and she was all over me.
s-christy,remember what we just talked about.
c-no fucc that. See tawanna that's your problem now, u all over everyone else man but ur own.
t-what? How u gonna believe him over me? I'm supposed to be ya girl.
d-baby she is lying I'm telling you.
c-shut up. I knew this was a mistake bringing him over her to meet u, it's not like everyone doesn’t know why allen cut u. Ur a hoe, just live with it.
s-Christy, c'mon now. That wasn't called for.
t-(crying) it's like that?
c- hell yea .with the way u screw around I'm surprised them kids are Allen’s. Darrell lets go.
d-iight. I'll talk to u later Sheka. Tawanna.
c-now!
(Christy and Darrell leave)
t-sheka u believe me right?
s-ummmmmmmm.
t-don't tell me u think that this was my fault.
s-is wasn't anyone's fault it takes two, but someone had to instigate it and.....
t-are u trying to say that u think that I started it?
s-T, u know u my girl, but from what's out here on the streets, I don't know what to think.
t-I can't believe you, your supposed to be my friend.
s-I am, but I don't think that this is the right place for u to be chilling right now.
t-u kicking me out? U know I don't have no where else to go.
s-it's not even like that, it's just that my man is coming over, and-
t-and what? u think I'm gonna try and get with him?
s-I didn't say that.
t-might as well, ok, I'll leave. I just want u to know that this is fucced up.
(T gets her stuff and is walking out the door)
s-T u know u my girl.
t-save it.

T gets in her car and is just driving around. She doesn’t know where to go so she is just driving.

T-(thinking) damn, I don't have no where to go, and now everybody thinks I'm a hoe. And trust I got to watch my back cause I know it's some haters out here probably thinking that I did allen wrong and now they after me.Fucc! Damn I didn't know all this could happen to me. I wish I was at home with my kids and my husband.

(she is snapped out of her thinking when her cell rings)
t-hello?
she answers her phone and it's ..............................................................


Peace and Hair Grease.

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PostPosted: Mon Dec 16, 2002 3:55 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

man this is serious i cant wait to see where the iversons go from here
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 17, 2002 3:27 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ill add on a little lata so sit tight...
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 17, 2002 3:29 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ill add on a little lata so sit tight...
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 17, 2002 3:55 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

how long should I sit tight for because these stories got me hype?
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 17, 2002 7:19 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by *MizDiamonds*:
how long should I sit tight for because these stories got me hype?


cant wait can you
biting your fingernails are you
dont worry i aint laughing at you
cause guess what
i am doing those same things like you

please i hope you have a sense of humor
i had to say that no disrespect cause like i said i am waiting too ha ha
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 17, 2002 7:30 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

okay here i go:

t- allen...
a- bitch are you deaf!!???!! i sed get the f*** out!
t- okay, but baby can i pleez get my stuff?
a- get it, and get out my damn house.
t- iight, i am gonna hurry.
a- you got exactly 5minutes to get all ur stuff and the rest of it i am gonna give it to my "hoes".

tawannna is grabbibg her stuff a quickly as she can not believing how mean allen is treating her and how fucced up her life is.

a- your time is up hoe.
t- well at least let my kiss my kids goodbye, i havent seen them in a 4eva.
a- you lucky i am happy kesha bout to come over (lying) cuz otherwise i would just through you and your s*** out right this second.

tawanna goes and kisses deuce and tiaura goodnight and she is about to walk out the door.

t- allen
a- what?
t- i know this is all fucced up and you probally are never going to 4give me but no matter what, you are still my first, last, and only, love and nobody can ever take your place. I am positive this dont mean s*** to you right now but...
a- i mean something.
t- on the real?
a- yea. but ya ass still getting out my damn house.
t- (looking and sounding disappointed) well i guess i am gonna have to sleep with Q so i can have a place to lay my head tonite.
tawanna starts to walk out the door, but allen stops her...
a- why go way over there to sleep with that nigga so you can have a place to stay? you can get all that right here.
t- ummmm....okay, lets go.

tawanna and allen go up stairs and get it on but in the morning everthing is not peaches and cream...................

okay everyone i know it is only a little bit but i promise that i will start writing longer ones. I get so busy during the week and it gets hard to find time (somehow i do). But somebody can add on, and hope yall still feeling the story.

~1~:

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PostPosted: Tue Dec 17, 2002 8:23 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

the story is slammin..keep it going..much props and god bless, answer_ai..
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 17, 2002 11:39 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by tameka foster:
cant wait can you
biting your fingernails are you
dont worry i aint laughing at you
cause guess what
i am doing those same things like you

please i hope you have a sense of humor
i had to say that no disrespect cause like i said i am waiting too ha ha




Its straight Tameka,no affense taken...but I was actually doing those things.


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PostPosted: Tue Dec 17, 2002 11:47 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

not to be rude of affend anyone,but in this story Tawanna is acting like a real trick....but I did kind of feel bad for her because it seemed like everyone was turning on her and she didn't have anywhere to....but how come she just didn't go stay with her mother?

Anyway....ya'll I'm loving these stories so please keep it up.

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PostPosted: Tue Dec 17, 2002 11:55 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by *MizDiamonds*:
not to be rude of affend anyone,but in this story Tawanna is acting like a real trick....but I did kind of feel bad for her because it seemed like everyone was turning on her and she didn't have anywhere to....but how come she just didn't go stay with her mother?

Anyway....ya'll I'm loving these stories so please keep it up.

~*~MizD~*~



that would be a good ideal but then again who wants to hear i told you so meaning her mother night not have wanted her and allen together in the first place i mean me personally i wouldnt want to go back home to my mother either but since this is just maybe it could work but damn will her mother take her in???

poor tawanna miz diamonds the story does make you feel kind of down i mean poor tawanna it makes you feel kind of sad for her but it is still good
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 18, 2002 12:11 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Its nice to know that you understand where I'm coming from and I agree with what you said before...I mean,I wouldn't want to come back to my mother either because all that would give me is more stress,worse headache's and nothing but drama....But I really wouldn't want to live in my car anyway and I thikn that (in some kind of strange way)Tawanna is going through this because atleast she truely see's what type of friends she has and now she feels the way that she made Allen feel in the beginning of the story everytime that she found out that he cheated on her...The shoe is basically on the other foot.

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PostPosted: Wed Dec 18, 2002 12:18 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Madd props to all writers, this story is hott
I'm about to add on now...

(Allen and Tawanna wake up from their long night, and T reaches over to Allen reminiscin
on when she used to wake up in the mornin)

t-hey boo
a-hi and bye
t-excuse me
a-i told you that you could get what all you needed right here, you said you needed a place to lay your head and i needed a female
t-what, so that's how it's gone go?
a-that's what i thought when q called you
t-let's not start allen, let's jus smash this
a-smash you cheatin on me, violatin my kids, my house, and my heart? are you sick?
t-no but i need to check your temperature
a-i'm fine, this may be the first time i feel alright, i got everything i needed
t-i'm glad you're satisfied, but that was pretty much how it alwasy was in this marriage, it was all about you
a-not when my money was buyin you sexy clothes and lingerie that you was probably dancin in for that nigga q in and not me
t-i never wore nothin sexy for that nigga
a-oh yeah cause you ain't have enough time, you was always scared that i was gone find out so you let him jus hit it and quit it
t-i wish you would think about all them hoes that you lay up with
a-i never grew attached to them to where i was bonin them constantly
t-what about kesha?
a-what? i lied to you so that maybe when you said stuff about you bonin q that it wouldn't hurt so much
t-whatever
a-all she did was give a nigga head, i didn't want her, or love her
t-allen don't start lyin to me now
a-if anybody is lyin it would be you cause i have no reason to lie, i got the kids, house, car, money, and women
t-okay allen and am i supposed to cry now?
a-any other time you do, why not now
t-allen this is ridiculous
a-no you're ridiculous
t-i'll be cookin breakfast
a-don't act like that's gonna make me want you back, but you know how i like my eggs boo
t-fa sho baby
a-don't call me baby, do i look like a baby?
t-when you were sleepin after i wore that out you did
a-nigga please, jus cook my food woman
t-........

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PostPosted: Sat Nov 22, 2003 4:40 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

awww i remember my story
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 22, 2003 9:42 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by Ta'Shanda:
It was tight.
t- let you think about it?
a- baby I'm jus playin come here.
(they hug)
t- I love you.
a- I love you too.
(they do wutever they do. the next day its around 7:30 in the evening. allen gettin all clean finna leave, he in the bathroom. Nia and t in the front room watchin tv allen comes in there)
a- T how I look
t- You look straight where you finna go?
a- To the store. Where else?
t- Boy dont play me for no fool.
n- T let him go
(she givin t a crazy look)
a- thanks nia.
n- yea bye.
t- bye baby.
(he go gets in his car. they stand up)
n- lets follow this nigga cause he aint finna be doin my cuz wrong.
(they wait til he pulls off then gets in Nia's car. They follow him. he rings yazmen's door bell she opens the door and at first they talkin then they kiss. Then she lets him. tawanna pulls off quick, takes nia home chills ther for a while. when she gets home allen is on his cell, he hangs it up when he sees her)
a- where you been?
(she walks up to him)
t- You a lyin cheatin son of a bitch the way you do me boy I'm tired of takin your s***. See I know all about those fast hoes that you be fuckin. You really need to stop it. You hear me?
a- Yea, Why you trippin on s*** you dont even know about believin evry damn thing you hear about.
t- Thats nothin that I heard.
a- wait a minute just hear me out. you dont even know what I be doin or where I be.
t- See you wrong today I busted you going into some girls house.
a- and wuts that spose to mean.
t- nothin till you kissed her in her mouth!
Boy lets stop waistin time its pretty clear that u a lie. Im tired of sittin round here wit you givin me all yo phony stories.
(tawanna walks up to her room he follows her)
a- baby wut you sayin?
t- Allen read between the lines. Do I have to spell it out for you I'm sayin goodbye.
(she starts packin her things)
a- All girl quit playin you did this s*** yesterday, I'm the only thing you got.
t- Your the only thing I got but then I must not have a lot.
a- Girl stop playin
t- Look just call my lawyer he will make the arrangements.
a- You want a divorce. (he think she playin)
t- Hell yes cause I'm fed up wit this.
a- How you just go leave like this.
t- Because you werent true to me.
a- Baby can we talk about it?
t- Wut is there to talk about, you done hurt me too many times, you torn me up and burnt me down.
a- Baby girl I'm sorry.
t- Sorry?
a- Grl you go make me lose it.
t- now wait I suggest you calm down and dont do nothin stupid.
a- Baby I just dont know wut I would do if I was to lose you.
(it gets quiet)
a- Baby
t-(she starts cryin) I'm sorry allen I'm leavin
(she gets her stuff and leaves. allen just sits down on the bed lookin stupid)




LOL i didnt notice it then but i see now that that came from "Laundromat."
LMAO that was cute tho.

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PostPosted: Sat Nov 22, 2003 10:47 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

why do yall hate tawanna so much .......... yall almost worsier than the people who were at their wedding yelling at tawanna that they hate her , wish she would die and that they fucked allen ........... i think it's kinda immature.
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 22, 2003 11:30 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

For your info, I do not hate tawanna because i do not know her enough to "hate" her. And you dont need to be using the term "yall" because nobody knows exactly who the hell you are talking about.

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 23, 2003 2:31 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

umhuh , i have better things to do than to argue , or respond to that , but I stated my opinion , after i read the story ,because thats how I felt . .... Overall the story is great. except, for a while it looked like tawanna was a begging puppy. but its still a good story.
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 23, 2003 3:15 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

Then dont reply to it but just to let you know I WAS NOT being argumenative I was simply stating a FACT. And I could careless whether you think I "hate Tawanna or not.

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 23, 2003 7:35 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by Nieceye:
Then dont reply to it but just to let you know I WAS NOT being argumenative I was simply stating a FACT. And I could careless whether you think I "hate Tawanna or not.

[ November 22, 2003: Message edited by: Nieceye ]



Uh-uh Nieceye, just let it go. Just take the comment, let all that other B.S. go its ur story write it however you want.

But n-eway that one part is like that Laundromat song, I couldnt help but sing it as I read it. LOL ! Yeah Im goofy as hell; I know, I know. It was funny though. When u gone add on this story?!

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 23, 2003 3:24 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by Karamel3A.I.:
Uh-uh Nieceye, just let it go. Just take the comment, let all that other B.S. go its ur story write it however you want.

But n-eway that one part is like that Laundromat song, I couldnt help but sing it as I read it. LOL ! Yeah Im goofy as hell; I know, I know. It was funny though. When u gone add on this story?!

[ November 22, 2003: Message edited by: Karamel3A.I. ]



girl i dont even know if i am gonna add on because a while ago i think i ended it but the last couple of pages are gone and I started a part II to it and ended it. But let me tell you....i was singing Laundromat 2.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 30, 2003 6:18 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

i am thinking about writing another story.....
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 30, 2003 7:30 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by *_Nieceye_*:
i am thinking about writing another story.....



Good!!!
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 30, 2003 10:34 pm    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

IM NEW BUT IMMA GIVE THA WRITERS THAY PROPS....IT WAS OFF THA HOOOOK 4REAL THO
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 31, 2003 5:14 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by babygurl45807:
IM NEW BUT IMMA GIVE THA WRITERS THAY PROPS....IT WAS OFF THA HOOOOK 4REAL THO


WELCOME, WELCOME, WELCOME
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nieceye_n_iverson
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 31, 2003 6:01 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by babygurl45807:
IM NEW BUT IMMA GIVE THA WRITERS THAY PROPS....IT WAS OFF THA HOOOOK 4REAL THO


thanx & welcome to the board.
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 31, 2003 7:12 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

yo this story is on fire right about now. Tawanna better stop fucking around on A.I. before her ass get the monsters(lol).but on the real s*** these muthafuckers confused they don't know if they wanna stay together or f*** somebody else.just keep doing yall thug thizzle. we might have some future terri mcmillan's and some zane's out this bitch.
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 31, 2003 7:44 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by Iverson_Is_Mines:
we might have some future terri mcmillan's and some zane's out this bitch.

LMAO
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 01, 2004 12:45 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I liked this story.
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 01, 2004 1:18 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

thanx
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b4bybum
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PostPosted: Wed Jan 07, 2004 3:07 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

u should really continue... like.. part 2...????? I don't know
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PostPosted: Wed Jan 07, 2004 5:11 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

I DID A PART 2 BUT IT GOT DELETED.
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Dunya
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 15, 2004 8:28 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

ur doin a good job. keep up the good writing.
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iversonluva227
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 15, 2004 8:36 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

dis story iz hott
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lashante3001
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 16, 2004 12:33 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

u didnt make any copies of part 2 or saved it.
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nieceye_n_iverson
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 16, 2004 4:42 am    Post subject: READ MY NEW STORY PLEEZ!!!!!

quote:
Originally posted by lashante3001:
u didnt make any copies of part 2 or saved it.


naw...but thanx everybody.
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